My first rap song or hip hop song??

When the time is here
I won't cower in fear
I will grow a spine
And take what is mine
I'm not even close to a cliche
Even though I might sound that way.
I know this has been said before
And I hope you aren't keeping score
But I need one chance
Before I can advance
To prove to you all
That I have the gall
To go forward
I maybe awkward
But I have the will
To make it still
This thirst can't be sated,
When I am motivated,
I may not be the best
But I do have zest
And I have the passion
Not to mention the compassion
To make it in this biz
Cause I am the whiz
Given one chance
I will be ready to take my stance.

Sound good (I try to sing it), but i miss some lines that reaped them self...

good luck

Sooooo... Do I have a future in the rap business? Haha

I only repeated chance and I did it on purpose.

I don't consider this as pure hiphop, rather as a good popsong with hiphop elements. Maybe this link can provide some inspiration where you might take this song musically. The song is currently a big hit in my country and a some other European countries. It's by the Belgian rapper/singer-songwriter Stromae. In my view the perfect hiphop/singer-songwriter crossover. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S_xH7noaqTA