bringing it back. ``Fallen``

We rise up
We stand alone
We watch the world end
Quickly as it begain
It all begains

In the end we are all alone
And no one comes to save you
No one seems to care
How do we destroy
Everything we ever lived for

Walk away
Walk away


We are the children of the fallen
Never forgotten

I'd like to help you. I've found a few typos in your song in the very first verse and I think if you corrected them you would have a pretty good set of lyrics here. So here we go...

Quickly as it (begain)<--- There is no such word in the English language. I think what you were going for is "began"
It all (begains)<--- Again, no such word in the English language. The word you're looking for here is "begins"

Other than that, it's pretty decent. Only other thing I'd advise is to make it just a bit longer. Most songs (Not all, for there is no set in stone rules.) go on the pattern of Verse/Chorus/Verse/Bridge/Chorus. Some go on Verse/Chorus/Verse/Chorus/Verse/Chorus. Still yet some go on Verse/Pre-Chorus/Chorus/Verse/Pre-Chorus/Chorus/Bridge/Chorus/Outtro.... Lol. Either way, I think you get my drift. Correct the typos and add a verse, figure out a definitive Chorus. You got something here. It just needs some work.

Correcting other people's grammar is in my opinion a very good thing, which should not offend anyone here.

Please, keep doing that- as far as I am concerned my lyrics may always be corrected.

When it comes to content, it's a different story.

Originally Posted by amaryn

Correcting other people's grammar is in my opinion a very good thing, which should not offend anyone here.

Please, keep doing that- as far as I am concerned my lyrics may always be corrected.

When it comes to content, it's a different story.

Liked this one!

Hi there, my friend in Athena! . Yes, this is worth a meeting in a taverna

Yeap Amaryn there are times when I really miss the "like" button.

And just for continuing this thread, speaking about these lyrics, I find them extremely philosophical.

I think thata great i write and post. I always like when i am corrected thanks.

Thanks i like how you put it a philosophical