6.5 billion colors

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  1. Teshka's Avatar

    Teshka said:

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    Watching a hard drive spin
    It all comes around again

    WHY can't you see
    That I am just ME
    And not a recycled clone
    Of your pitbull's favorite bone
    You gnaw on my persona
    As if you're the owner
    Of everything right
    And you've already won the fight

    Get a grip
    On your self righteous trip
    Open your eyes, free your brain
    Before you drive me insane
    With your huff and blow
    Cause it's all just a show
    Of your globalization
    Of the personal equation

    I'm not all red
    But your talking heads
    Paint everything 'me'
    With template hypocrisy
    And it's layered so thick
    That you can heave it like a brick
    At whatever moves
    Outside of your groove

    God forbid don't dishevel
    Your comfort level
    With original thought
    Because the ones that bought you
    Would tremble in angst
    If you dare to break rank
    With a Party plank....
    Hello hello it's Me! and I'm not the devil

    You want to read poetry
    Into your metered bigotry
    But what you can't see
    Is the verse about Me
    I'm not you
    Or your preferred shade of blue
    I'm unrehearsed
    In my own freestyle verse

    Wake up
    Before you break up
    The sanctity
    Of our mutual individuality
    Read between the lines
    For the truth that defines
    The One that is free
    To be who we each want to be

    Indigo, burgundy or
    Ochre edged in green....
    Where is the crime
    In taking the time
    To unpace the Walk
    And just Talk
    About You
    And Me.
    Last edited by Teshka; 07-26-2014 at 11:21 AM.
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
  2. MoonRide*r*'s Avatar

    MoonRide*r* said:

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    See, this is what I mean. This is already about half-rap.

    God forbid don't dishevel your comfort level with original thought
    'Cause the ones that bought you would get wrought up all distraught
    And draw a blank if you dare to break rank with the Party plank
    Hello hell-O it's Me! and I ain't the devil, that's what you just brought...

    Nothing added in this verse, it's practically done... use more or bigger adjectives or something:

    You want to read poetry in your metered bigotry
    But what you don't see is the verse about Me
    I'm not you or your preferred shade of blue
    I'm unrehearsed in my own freestyle verse


    Just sayin'. Go for it. Version 2. I dare you.
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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  3. Teshka's Avatar

    Teshka said:

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    You do it

    But yea I did think about that after I wrote stuff like 'your globalization of the personal equation' and 'unrehearsed/freestyle verse'....so idk, maybe I should have. Maybe....
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
  4. muge's Avatar

    muge said:

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    Why is there no like button, nor thank you button? Why, simply why?! Is it your poem?
    Söz veriyorum, her şey çok güzel olacak, sadece sen ve ben...
     
  5. Teshka's Avatar

    Teshka said:

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    omg i have no idea muge.....of course i wouldn't know bcs it wouldn't show for me. But i can see 'thanks' buttons in the replies from you guys so idk, it's strange...

    Yes it's all mine, i wrote it at work and posted it here from my cell.

    I have 2 others that i posted recently in Poetry, wonder if those are missing the thanks button as well....
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
  6. muge's Avatar

    muge said:

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    No no, I was just too stupid to see it. Now I found it. Brilliant, honey, keep up the good work! =) I'll read those as well.
    Söz veriyorum, her şey çok güzel olacak, sadece sen ve ben...
     
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    Teshka said:

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    Thank you so much muge! It's especially great to get feedback from friends that i know and respect on a deep personal level
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    muge said:

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    :* <3
    Söz veriyorum, her şey çok güzel olacak, sadece sen ve ben...