"Ray of Sunshine"

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    BackInBlack said:

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    I like feeding the ducks and geese
    And I like taking walks in the park
    Everything's okay and I'm complete
    Because I have such a happy heart

    I'm just a ray of sunshine
    I feel just like a million bucks
    I'm just a ray of sunshine
    I'm just kidding... Everything Sucks

    I like helping at the soup kitchen
    And I help feed a third world nation
    This world's problems have my attention
    But I don't let them ruin my elation

    I'm just a ray of sunshine
    I feel just like a million bucks
    I'm just a ray of sunshine
    I'm just kidding... Everything Sucks

    Everything Sucks
    Just like it always has
    Everything Sucks
    Present, future and past
    Everything Sucks
    Everything Sucks
     
  2. Alex Robinson said:

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    Nothing much wrong with this, maybe lose a syllable or two on the 3rd and 4th lines of the second verse/stanza, could do with being a little longer but thats just a preference.
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Hahaha! Lovely Sarcastic Ditty, BiB! These kind of lyrics give a grateful hand to composers and instrumentalists.
    Lots of different opportunities there. Take your pick, folks, pick up that line "everything sucks" and make sure it's being heard/understood.
     
  4. ElegantButler said:

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    Excellent song. I love the twist. It counters the first verse nicely. Very wel written
     
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    BackInBlack said:

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    Thanks Alex. I appreciate your critique.
     
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    BackInBlack said:

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    Thanks amaryn. Sarcasm is one of my specialties. Lol
     
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    BackInBlack said:

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    Thanks ElegantButler, I appreciate it.