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    Default You are gonna be okay

    You've been slipping on the edge of time
    Telling yourself not to cry
    And I know you're stronger and better than all of us
    Holding on to the place you call home
    All the things that you've seen but you've never been that way
    Look at me, you're gonna be okay

    I'll make it right with a bit of light
    We'll catch a train that'll keep you sane
    Let the morning rain wash away your pain
    We'll getaway so let's getaway

    This is not just a waste of time
    Lifting ourselves we're all just beginning to shine
    Make it count, I won't be holding you back
    Scared of what you might find in your mind
    You're living in shame and blaming yourself
    But look at me, you're gonna be okay

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    When I read this, I felt kind of happy and releaved or eased, it made me smile, I think somethings missing tho, try to use more feelings, cuze I feel it's a lyric with love behind it and it can make the reader cry (happy tears) with a litte more feeling to it. Btw I'm no expert so u don't have to do anything u don't wan't to

    -SilverA

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    Quote Originally Posted by SilverA View Post
    When I read this, I felt kind of happy and releaved or eased, it made me smile, I think somethings missing tho, try to use more feelings, cuze I feel it's a lyric with love behind it and it can make the reader cry (happy tears) with a litte more feeling to it. Btw I'm no expert so u don't have to do anything u don't wan't to

    -SilverA
    I know what you're talking about, but it's more for a friend so.
    Last edited by Cosmothefuturist; 03-01-2017 at 06:06 AM.

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    Oh, when I wrote "love" I mean the gender love, sp you wrote about friendly love, try to feel the love you have for your friend and yeah haha

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