Sailboats (A ship fit for Lovers)

Hey, please feel free to critique, give advice, or make fun of my lyrics, I'm only fifteen and haven't written much, so try not to kill me.

Sailboat

Verse

And her I am, trapped in a sailboat
Not your normal sailboat no nope
A sailboat built for lovers this is
But there is a steelbared cage around it

I climbed into the boat unaware
Blinded by a love ever so rare
But when the bars closed in and I was trapped
I desperately wanted out



Pre-Chorus

Im slamming on the cages, I want to bail out
Screaming inside till my lungs burst, and to the seas I shout out



Chorus

Do you hate me, I just want to swim away
To a luxury cruise, where love is real, but where I dont have to stay x2



Verse2

But despite my best efforts, the waves only grow
Look at the mess Ive got my self into now
My love is fading, but was it ever real
Did we really ever love, was any of it real

But Oh my god, I found a key under a board
Of the rusted old sail boat, where lovers were stored
I could open the bars, and I could bail out
But is the water deceiving me? All I could do was shout



Chorus

Do you hate me, I just want to swim away
To a luxury cruise, where love is real, but where I dont have to stay x2



Bridge

But if I jump will I ever find that luxury cruise
Or maybe this love that im yearning for, something I will lose
Does it really exist, Is it something I will ever find
Maybe love is just something I created in my mind
But Im struggling at the bars, should a bail or not
But all i can see is me drownging on the spot
So I decide to wait, if she loves me I will find out
But until then I will lean through the bars and aloud will shout


Chorus

Do you hate me, I just want to swim away
To a luxury cruise, where love is real, but where I dont have to stay x4

~Bump~

OMG thats good, but needs one more verse if u get one more verse i can get my cuz to record it!!!!!!!!!! check out MINE PLEASE!!! and leave comments...

Thanks a bunch, I love the comments. I will write another verse as soon as I get some random inspiration, so that could be anywhere in between five minutes and a week, lol. Sometimes I just come up with stuff randomly. But it would be an honour. I looked at yours and left a comment as well, just to give you a heads up.