Plz revew and tell me how they can be made better.
1. Life or Death
I’m falling,
Can't Breath,
I hear my calling,
Shouting my name!
My heart is still beating inside my chest,
Sucking in My last Breath,
Eyes set on my Ending,
Openly accepting Death
Nearer and nearer,
The Enemy is coming,
Am I Dreaming?
Is it to be?
Am I to die?
Standing here?
It is my time?
Or am I just asleep?
Can't Breath
No I Can't Breath
Can't Breath... (3 sec pause)
NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I WONT LIE DOWN!
WON’T LET YOU TAKE ME!
SO MUCH I HAVE YET TO DO IN MY LIFE!
F**K!!!
You will never take me down, "never!"
Never take me out "hey!"
Never Take my...LIFE!!!
LIFE
2. Misery
Alone in my world of misery,
Feeling the Life Draining away,
Alone all my life,
Seems to be...
When my Life Is over
Another Begins
With-out the sins,
The Problems of previous life,
Call and I won’t answer,
Cry and I won’t answer,
Fall and I won’t catch you,
I am gone and Never Coming back now!
Alone in my world of misery...
Alone in my world of misery...
Alone in my world of...MISERY!!!!
MISERY!!!!
MISERY!!!!
MIS..ER..Y!!!!
Call and I won’t answer
Cry and I won’t Answer
Fall and I won’t catch you,
I AM GONE AND NEVER COMING BACK NOW!!!