My newest metal song, a bit slower than usual.

Ok this is it, if you havent read my previous songs do so, they rock lol. This is my latest creation,

War inside

how could it be you critisize,
the very reasons your alive,
how can you hide behind your pain,
when its all over what is gained?
because..
you had it all when we began,
you had the world inside your hands,
living a life that lead you on,
when its all over who has won?

broken and shattered are your dreams,
just when i thought your changing me,
living a life that lead you on,
when its all over who has won!

who has won...!
who has won...!
when its done...

Dont take it likely the message drawn,
Dont turn away from your problems gone,
Its not the end only time may change,
Believe the outcome, it remains the same.
Because...
you had it all when we began,
you had the world inside your hands,
living a life that lead you on,
when its all over who has won?

who has won...!
who has won...!

broken and shattered are your dreams,
just when i thought your changing me,
living a life that lead you on,
when its all over who has won!
When its done...

Awsome! this song makes alot of sence to me. A+

thanks alot liulkun, even though it was a bit rushed....lol

i think thats really good, and for something thats rushed thats really good!

thanks, really appreciate it.