Summer

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  1. Kates_Agony's Avatar

    Kates_Agony said:

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    Can you feel that ocean breeze?
    Feel the raging sun rising overhead?
    Taste the beginning of the summer?
    Hear the roar of the waves?
    Is it alright to runaway,
    Say goodbye?

    Chorus:

    Because the summer's here
    And I can't let go
    All that I fear
    Is coming back so..
    The memories of last summer
    Take over my mind,
    Take over my emotions
    And I just gotta get away

    Dreams of every perfect night
    Drift over my head
    Out of my mind
    But the nightmares
    Of every ****ing fight
    Seem to just stay
    Suffocating, intoxicating
    So is it alright to runaway,
    Say goodbye?

    Chorus

    The pain is too intense
    The memories all too clear
    I hope you're happy
    Seeing the mess you made
    I hope you know
    You're not welcome back

    Chorus

    And there's so much to say
    I hope SHE's happy
    Flaming hearts torn in two
    So ripped and scarred
    But we'll be okay
    Just gotta get away
    Last edited by Kates_Agony; 06-14-2007 at 10:10 PM. Reason: Ehh trying to make it a little better
     
  2. sparks said:

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    the opening stanza is just plain good, the imagery was perfect.
    the chorus wasn't so hot, but it wasn't awful either.

    Why did you have to..
    Be like that?
    Pull me back up
    Then just go ahead
    And let me fall again?
    I hope you're happy
    Seeing the mess you made
    I hope you know
    You're not welcome back
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

    that seemed a little cliche to me.

    overall it's alright, there's some really good lines in there.
     
  3. Kates_Agony's Avatar

    Kates_Agony said:

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    Yeah, I don't like that part as much either. >.> I just got writer's block then.

    I like the beginning as well..I'll probably have to agree with you. I'm really new at writing lyrics, but I'm learning.
    Thanks
    ♥ The agony has not yet begun ♥
     
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    SpudMunky said:

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    Hey there! Those lyrics are really good! I think that they work really well! Very well done!
    Do you serve a purpose or purposely serve?
     
  5. Krent_Calstro777's Avatar

    Krent_Calstro777 said:

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    It's quite expressionable, I like your way of words and imagry. ^^ when I've read it, a melody popped up in my head but there a word that did bump the road was "****ing" but i know you meant the fight is irritated, fed up though lol.
    this song is what happening to my cousin recently he runaway too.. for 2 weeks! lol
    Damning Reficul: Song is like singing from the light whilst the emotions can be so raw from the darkness.