Plz rate / criticize this

it's my first songtext in like 4 years, been working on it 2 weeks ago (no not 2 weeks just one evening 2 weeks ago )

Break Free

A Dark and Painfull life it was
Waiting there for me
I know I had no choise but
I just wanted to be free
And everytime I think about
All that I have been
Nothing I could do but my
Guilty consience's chasing me

So please let me go
Why won't you let me go

I wanted to break free
But you were holding me
You pushed me back into the menace
You've blindfolded me

I wanted to break free
To save you and me
I wanted to bring us both redemtion
But we were doomed all along

I knew you had you're grip on me
I felt it all the way
I didn't want to let you go
In lonelyness I'd stray
So after all I've become addicted
You were a part of me
Without you I felt so empty
I needed you to be

I never knew we'd end up this way
I never knew we were so wrong

I wanted to break free
But you were holding me
You pushed me back into the menace
You've blindfolded me

I wanted to break free
To save you and me
I wanted to bring us both redemtion
But we were doomed all along

And now im lying here in pain
You've left me after all I gave for you
I don't have a clue why I'm still here
I just want to be alive

I wanted to break free
But you were holding me
You pushed me back into the menace
You've blindfolded me

I wanted to break free
To save you and me
I wanted to bring us both redemtion
But we were doomed all along

Please post what you think off it, I try to contribute to other posts too, be criticizing, I hope to see some reply's that actually add something

Wow this is really good.

Ty I kinda hopen for more replies and some this and that should be better to improve it, but it's always good to hear some saying it's good

I think its great! The subject and title are a little cliche, but, you put a lot of creativity into it to make it different from all the rest.

Yeah I know, I basicly just write what I feel, but my feeling are kinda influenced by the music I listen, so it turns out pretty much like that Thanks for your reply. (Y)