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Leaves Burnt By Autumn By Ash Red Saturday( Which is my band)

Sometimes I Break But No One Seems To Care.
I let this blood flow too freely.
Shadows don't show up where I stand.
I think I Don't belong with....

The End of the Earth is where I bleed.
Th End Of the Earth is Where I'm Free!

It's not my business, but what do you think,
about the darkness that I breath.
If I Showed you why I'm so different,
Than would you run away?

The End of the Earth is where I Bleed
The End of the Earth is where I'm Free!
The End Of Life Is As It Seems
The End Of Life Is What I Breed

Don't run away from darkness,
Embrace me and I will too.
If Shadows run your life,
Than I Can't Hurt You!!!!!!!!!!!

The End Of The Earth Is Where I Bleed
The End of the Earth is Where i'm Free!
The End of Life Is As It Seems
The End Of Life Is What I Breed

It won't Hurt Forever,
The Pain You Feel,
Love with Vampires Is all That's Real

The End Of The Earth Is Where I Bleed
The End of the Earth is Where i'm Free!
The End of Life Is As It Seems
The End Of Life Is What I Breed

*End of Song*
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hey man those lyrics are tight true to the heart its pretty catchy from the way that i sung it i really like it the only thing i didnt get was the end line the end of life is what i breed??? idk but hey thnx for posting comments on my lyrics man it really helped and it was a lot catchy after you corrected it thnx one love man

That line means that the vampire kills people. Simple as that. But Thnx on commenting!

Originally Posted by noaht12321

That line means that the vampire kills people. Simple as that. But Thnx on commenting!

The vampire? whose the vampire?

nice, I loved the seemless flow of your structure and rhyming through the whole song. Loved the dark feel to it aswell.

Just one thing, I think it would be better without

It won't Hurt Forever,
The Pain You Feel,
Love with Vampires Is all That's Real

I think the song would work better if you keep the vampire theme as an undertone without specifically mentioning it. just my thoughts anyway.

THanx I'll ask the band about that

Originally Posted by petrochik

The vampire? whose the vampire?

The Vampire is the guy the whole song is about