Summer of Lights - please rate this its my first song

This will be a summer to remember
Do you promise me that?
That’s all I ask

The sun on my back never felt so sweet
Like the taste of your lips or the popsicles you (loved to) eat
I wish I could hit pause and stay like this forever

Fireworks and a hint of a smile in the darkness
Those little bits of light are what keeps us alive
So why not make this a summer of love, a summer of lights
Filled with blissful days and thrilling nights

We hold hands down the road
Walking never felt like flying before this moment
As we make our way to the waves
we soar

Dewdrops and the morning sunrise
Holding tight and never letting go
Don’t leave me here

I might die if you let me go

Moonlight and your sparkling eyes
Those little bits of light are what keeps us alive
So why not make this a summer of love, a summer of lights
Filled with blissful days and thrilling nights

Bridge:
Don’t let go of my hand, my heart
Keep my gaze forever
Don’t let me fall apart

Glimmers of happiness can make a spark
And light up the nights
Brighten up the dark




This will be a summer to remember, as you once said
I kissed you by the tree you love, and it felt as if heaven was on earth
I kissed you back with everything I’m worth


You sang and ran down the road and as I watched you
I smiled more than ever before
I want to stay here forever more

In this summer

Your eyes, your smile, your laugh your touch
Those little bits of light are what keep me alive
Don’t you forget this summer of love, this summer of lights
Filled with blissful days and thrilling nights

The magic glow of summer lights




copyright k.s. 2007

please reply and rate and stuff PLEASE.
i need feedback positive or negative. i just want people to read this

I liked it, it seems like not wanting to let go of love but having to against your will because summer drew to an end.
People really could relate to this because everyones had a summer love. Everything is described beautifully.
I especially liked the line "We hold hands down the road walking never felt like flying before this moment." I dont have anything bad to say about this at all.
=] Keep writing.

Hi,

it's a very nice song, the kind that makes you cry, so I think I'd enjoy listening to it. Keep it up.

Hmm, this line seemed to mess with the first stanza, and it also screwed the metre going. It lacked flow.

Like the taste of your lips or the popsicles you (loved to) eat

I don't have a problem with long songs, but this sounds like it would be...6-7 minutes, its just too long.

Nice imagery though, that did stand out, I love your imagery.

good work! this is great. but i do agree that it seems realllllly long.

I have nothing bad to say this at al becuase it's very written and it give of powerful atmosphere, image, I like it alot, my assumption this song takes, 5 mins and 25 sec, give or take.

hmm... really nice for a 1st song, nice beat... good ryme...
thumbs up \,,/ (-.-)
as for the length... (and this is my opinion) the longer the better, as long as you belive what you write, and never give in to the cridics