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Thread: I'll Be Yours, You'll Be Mine (NEW SONG!)

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    Default I'll Be Yours, You'll Be Mine (NEW SONG!)

    everytime i come around u want me
    we could just take this love thing slowly
    cause baby u dont really know me
    now all u gotta do is show me (show me)
    everytime you come around i want you
    got me hypntoized can i jus flaunt u?
    confused, im lost, dont know what to do?
    how can i get to you?!


    you're beautiful eyes
    got me mezmerzied
    i wanna get to know u baby i cannot lie
    come with me and ill take you to paradise
    ill be yours and youll be mine

    (chorus)
    we could go on a trip
    take a plane and just dip
    shawty leave this all behiiind
    baby you aint gotta trip
    you know that i always got it
    ill be yours and then youll be miiine


    shawty u gotta let me know
    whats the deal, are we on the low?
    baby girl i just gotta know
    do we move fast? or do we take things slow?! (take things sloowww)
    visions of us together
    baby it couldnt get no better
    i wrote you this love letter
    jus to let you knooooww!

    your beautiful eyes
    got me mezmerized
    i wanna get to know u baby i cannot lie
    come with me and ill take you to paradise
    ill be yours and youll be mine

    (chorus- 2x)



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    i really want someone to perform some of my songs, cause i cannot sing lol. any up for it?

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    Do you just write the lyrics or are there melodies for your songs? What kind of music are they/should they be?
    I like this one, it has an original subject not just the usual "i love you so much blabla" Some rhymes are a bit weak (e.g. want me - slowly) but it depends on the music whether this matters or not.

    Luvya

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    well, i will hear a song on the radio or on a cd of mine and the melody from that song is stuck in my head. so then i use it to write songs. i usually need a melody in order for me to write, its kinda hard writing without a tune

    and by the way, thank u for the verse and chorus.

    oh and yes i know sometimes the rhyming is a bit weak but it gets kinda tough using the same rhyming words more than 4 times in a row

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    I work the other way round...a phrase would pop up in my head and then I continue writing, the music finds its way automatically. I'm even singing phone numbers to memorize them

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