"Every Blow" im back =)

heh, been a wile but im back... i had this siting in my "notebook of distraction"
im back to writing songs for a little wile i guess... also... i know i use too many dots, exclamations, and stuff... but its a habit, what can i say? well... here goes nothing...

Every Blow

i've heard the things people say,
about me... about you, and the things that we do,
just becuse we see the world the way it is,
and fight the power that comes within,
We flip a coin and watch it spin,
and I Crack my fist across their chin,
heh...
yea, i know how things have been...
sad and slow... and i know...
you've taken every blow...
just becuse we see the world the way it is,
and fight the power that comes within,
i fliped my coin and watched it spin... and they know...
i'll make them pay...

Took you from me in every way...
You took my heart, they took you...
and now i dont care what they do...

i feel no pain...
no fear...
no happyness will come to me...

just becuse we see the world the way it is,
doesent mean that it cant spin..
Spin back time...
make it alright a-gain...
but for me and what i've seen....

i've seen the things people can do,
to me... and to you...
just becuse we've seen the world the way it is,
and fought power that came within,
i fliped the coin and i've watch it spin...
and after all... your still gone...

heh... heh...
i know... this is insain... what i've done to deserve this pain?
and what is it that they gain?

and i really dont give a ****, they can do no-more, for i've nothing more, nothing more... to keep on living for...

sad and slow... and i know...
you've taken every blow...

just becuse we see the world the way it is,
and fight the power that comes within,
i fliped my coin and watched it spin... and they know...
i'll make them pay...

your still gone... (still gone..)
and im... not there to care,
they can do nothing more... for im alive no-more....

I really like it..

I got mixed messages from it though.

a) Someone took your girl

b)bullies taking your happiness/life

c)'The world' taking your happieness/life

and a few others mixed in there too.

If you want it vaige then it's very good.

If you want people to know you're specific situation then you'll need to add in an extra verse or do some editing

but i really like it, nice work. (Y)

Not exactly the "lyrics" I like or agree with....but....the structure, the format and the pain can be seen and heard throught the words. Yeah, i also agree that you are a little all over the place...however, it is your expression and your way. I like the arrangement of the flow, but the lyrics, you know me homeboy, i question them......all in all, the best i've seen from you.

-in Christ
-Restoration