kinda depressing...

So young, naive
open her head, blank slate
we’ll paint a beautiful masterpiece
but our paints made of poison
and she’s done for

fingers pointed, sharp words spoken
critics churning venoms in her mind

do you see her crying?
Her tears are spilling
create a tidal wave
and drown all the hope in the world

take this time
to realize what we’ve done
she’s like a hollow shell
so dark and cold
she just wants a hand to hold
cause she’s slipping away

do you see her crying?
Can you hear her dying?

now we see
this poor girl grown
giving up on life
for she’s all alone
in a hole, and we looked passed

do you see her crying?
Her tears are spilling
create a tidal wave
and drown all the hope in the world

her eyes are blank
and her bodies dying
but her thoughts are churning
and her lips are moving
“Thank’s for trying, but I’m still dying”

i just wanna know what people think haha

by the look of the deleted post meaning someone think it's garbage but I'm not sure it is to me but it's ok though.

Kind of dark though, I have no problem with that. Looks to me like you are a good lyricist (?). The music for the lyrics would be along the lines of that similar in style to Liz Durrett, Regina Spector, Cat Power, Sarah McLachan, etc. Regardless, it appears to me that you have a really good talent that you should pursue 'til ......

whoa.. back it up there... look like we got great minds alike XD I wrote something that about is this but it was written in a different stand or point of veiw even so, i still like it ^^