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  1. evereade said:

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    They can not knock me down because my backs against the wall
    Dont none these people like me well ok forget them all
    Im know for standing tall even though im only six feet
    Cause i know if i fall then im going to be lying six feet
    I keep my head up in the clouds so i cant see none you lames
    And you know i cant be touched so they can not feel my pain
    Never been where ive came never trudged down my path
    So how you people get to judge i just do not get the math
    This right here is a fact most these people think im stupid
    But when they treat me like a dummy man i leave em lookin foolish
    The ask me will i do it like its no strings attatched
    But when a brother cut the ropes leaves the ventriliquist lookin mad
    Its ok blame my dad because my father always taught me
    Dont worry bout what they doin and nothin can ever stop me


    That is as far as i got so far tell me what you think
     
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    Drummer for Vertiis said:

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    This is ok, not a huge fan of this type of lyric but it's ok
    War of races, world without intelligence
    A place consumed by time - End of it all

    We're born with pain
    No more... We're dead embryonic cells
     
  3. HellBellsLiveWire said:

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    "Im know for standing tall even though im only six feet
    Cause i know if i fall then im going to be lying six feet"

    I would change this line to-

    Im known for standing tall, When they try to knock me down
    Cause I know that if I fall, I'll end up six feet under the ground

    Also, in the beginning of the song you're singing as if your talking about somebody, then later you're singing as if your talking to somebody. Ex.

    "They can not knock me down because my backs against the wall
    Dont none these people like me well ok forget them all"
    Then...
    "I keep my head up in the clouds so i cant see none you lames
    And you know i cant be touched so they can not feel my pain"

    You keep on switching back and forth, just a little inconsistency.
     
  4. evereade said:

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    Thanks ive been hearing that alot even about when i talk to people that i am constantly switching subjects in the middle of sentences i need to focus harder