CAn you help me with a title?

Take a minute to look back to see
where your life is heading off track
new things get old real fast
and that fire from your love
has just ben extuinguished
but dont give up hope right now
because who know when life will bring you back down

(chorus)
Cause the world is spinning round faster, andfaster
your heart is beating slower and you feel like your going to die
your not sure where the next move is guess you will go in slow motion
til your sure where to go
because the road isnt always paved in gold
and at times you will like the traveled road but be sure to know they love you

Dont be scared
they dont know you, who's to tell what you can do
sometimes life can spit you out
but make sure to recooperate yourself
you can get back up again
cause sometime life is confusing how sweet it can be

(chorus)
cause the world is spinning round faster, and faster
your heart is beating slower and you feel like your going to die
your not sure where the next move is guess you will go in slow motion
til your sure where to go
because the road isnt always paved in gold
and at times you will like the traveled road but be sure to know i love you

(bridge)
dont judge yourself
dont blame mistakes that you had no beginning with
just remember your perfect the way you are
your a shining star

(chorus)
cause my world is spinning round faster, and faster
my heart is beating slower and i feel like im going to die
im not sure where the next move is guess i will go in slow motion
till im sure where to go
because the road isnt always paved in gold
and at times ill like the traveled road but be sure to know you love you

i just took a minute to look back to see where my life was headed off track
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please comment. i am only 13 and this is my favorite and best song i think so far that i have written. judge hard. also look at some of my other songs

It reminds me a bit a song of a greek singer (Sakis Rouvas).It is called "egw xoris emena" - "me without me" ....

thanks. So far i just call it untitled. What it neant for me was that even though the world may be turning on me there was somone aqlways out there that loved me.

"It's a Crazy Spinning World" maybe? I just feel like thats some of the words that puts everything in that song together in the chorus.

I think that if writing is one of your passions , you should keep goinig on.
When i was younger ( I'm saying this like I'am very old now ). I wrote too ,but now I have other priorites and when i have some time ,I grab a letter and write sth ( the poetic soul always remains )
If you think it's important CARRY ON

PS: lateley , i'm feeling very romantic !

yea it is something i am probably gonna continue on. I mean i have always had an A in english and Choir. But i usually do every writing contest possible at my school. Thanks for all the titles. U should read my other songs. Like struck by lightning and horrible kiss. LOL horrible kiss was just for fun and the only friend ive shown laughs at it.

Usually I start off reviews with a compliment, but really, you aren't giving me much to work with here. First of all, you might want to check your spelling and grammar, "l;ook" is unacceptable unless you are E. E. Cummings. Secondly, there is a thing called meter, utilize it. Liberally. Moreover - what on earth are you trying to say with this song? Forget that, what are you trying to say in general? How does one "mill like the traveled road"? And what's wrong with your not sure? Perhaps you need a replacement not sure?

And as for a title, I suggest you call it "YOU SPIN ME RIGHT ROUND BABY RIGHT ROUND...

Like A Record, Baby, Right Round.

Round Round.

Originally Posted by Raygun

Usually I start off reviews with a compliment, but really, you aren't giving me much to work with here. First of all, you might want to check your spelling and grammar, "l;ook" is unacceptable unless you are E. E. Cummings. Secondly, there is a thing called meter, utilize it. Liberally. Moreover - what on earth are you trying to say with this song? Forget that, what are you trying to say in general? How does one "mill like the traveled road"? And what's wrong with your not sure? Perhaps you need a replacement not sure?

And as for a title, I suggest you call it "YOU SPIN ME RIGHT ROUND BABY RIGHT ROUND...

Sorry I am gonna fix the spelling mistakes when I am done. I was typing this down in a hurry because my mom didn't know I was on the the computer

Originally Posted by Raygun

Usually I start off reviews with a compliment, but really, you aren't giving me much to work with here. First of all, you might want to check your spelling and grammar, "l;ook" is unacceptable unless you are E. E. Cummings. Secondly, there is a thing called meter, utilize it. Liberally. Moreover - what on earth are you trying to say with this song? Forget that, what are you trying to say in general? How does one "mill like the traveled road"? And what's wrong with your not sure? Perhaps you need a replacement not sure?

And as for a title, I suggest you call it "YOU SPIN ME RIGHT ROUND BABY RIGHT ROUND...

She's 13.
I'm 15.
You're how old?

Ant jeez, stop pikin on mi gramer. i no ime knot thee moest edjewkated purson in thee wurld, butt still, weere onli kids. its knot like weere goin too bee abel too right songs like perofeshonals.

Originally Posted by Raygun

First of all, you might want to check your spelling and grammar, And what's wrong with your not sure?

Well for one, it's you're, not your

Originally Posted by Jester

Well for one, it's you're, not your

Good call!

This is a hard one... how about:
catch me when I fall
Out of control
you stop me spinning

Originally Posted by hart716

She's 13.
I'm 15.
You're how old?

Ant jeez, stop pikin on mi gramer. i no ime knot thee moest edjewkated purson in thee wurld, butt still, weere onli kids. its knot like weere goin too bee abel too right songs like perofeshonals.

Reelly. Blamee publik shools. They teach nuttin

Originally Posted by hart716

Good call!

I thought so too.

I cannot stand people who call others without checking themselves first.

Originally Posted by lyricsfromtheheart

Reelly. Blamee publik shools. They teach nuttin

Hahahaha, I actually don't go to a public school.
I've been private since I was 4.

Originally Posted by Jester

Well for one, it's you're, not your

Sir, congratulations. You have made me laugh uncontrollably. You and hart716, who agreed with you.

You're = you are
Your = possessive

I hate people who incorrectly correct people who correct people correctly.

So "Check you are grammar" is not correct; indeed, it was Raygun and her sharp mind who won this battle of wits. Although, someone should tell her that it is simply not sporting to enter into such a battle with an unarmed opponent.

Originally Posted by Jester

Well for one, it's you're, not your

Sir (Madam?), I was poking fun at the fact that the OP had written "your". I proceeded to take this grammatical error and make light of it, referring to "not sure" as a noun, as the OP does. Since she very clearly stated facts about her "not sure", I merely followed suit, questioning her about this "not sure". Perhaps one could point me to where I could acquire a "not sure" of my own, they sound quite lovely.

And I don't see how my age comes into this, but let me assure you, I had absolutely impeccable grammar even at the tender age of 13, albeit my writing didn't pack quite a punch.

Haha I know to watch my spelling in the future. The Word Police are about.
Anyway, shouldn't we comment on the song and suggest a title rather than going on about spelling? (although I want to congratulate Jester haha)
I just want to say good job with the song. I liked it a lot but I'm not sure about a title. "Finding Your Way" maybe?
(That one is your and not you're, yeah?) :P