My rap lyrics

Hi.
Im sorta new and wanna know if my lyrics are any good.
Wanna know if its something worth chasing
All opinions welcome...

Yo,
I rap to this beat like no other,
Give it a new cover,
Like a new baby from a mother.
Lyrics so sick from when i was born,
I came in a new form,
I was a soljah
And i had to perform,
A mission
called Operation desert storm.
But right now im just chilling on streets.
Laying low from the heat.
But perfecting the beat
And my flow
Or shall i say the golden glow
I can make it go fast
Or i can make it go slow
Although
On road theres so many laws
Theres so many wars
You have to fight for whats yours
And your not safe behind doors
Theyl come and put you on all fours
and take tours
through your drawers
Thats why
I sneak up on em silentley
And kill em all violentley

Thanks

Well?

its ok. i think its kind of hard to understand exactly what youre trying to say.
its obvious you can rhyme.
dont worry so much about it rhyming perfectly.
just make sure you get your point across.

when it comes to rap .. best one av seen so far ... but i onli bin here 4 few days so still

heck yeah

Eminem is admired caus he tells an interesting story in each song, and he rhymes double to triple syllables, like batting violent, staten island, fat and silent:
That's random, but as a tip it's not very ammusing to see mother, brother and girl, world rhymes (not hating) lol

the tightest flow on the planet - the righteous don't panic - the whitest known granite
Oil of Olay - spoil the day - foiled and played
egg yolks in your eyes - dead folks say goodbye - you choked on your lines
lackluster - just clutter - colonel mustard
worldwide stage - real tight cage - just got paid
listen to that - stick in your back - hit you so fast
rhyming words - flying herds - mining for turds
Houston Texas - who's goin' test this - goose for breakfast
IHOP - hi-tops - why not - my doc - flip flop - I bought - cyclops - eye sock(et) - cry a lot
waffle House - awful blouse
Doritos - you're weak homes -more meat yo
Batman - flat plan - back hand - fat tan
Magical Mystery Tour - mad you'll hit me your bore - battle your sister for pork
major fail - save your mail - play the scale - filleted the snail
for the win - born again - pour the gin