Amoniac/Cars

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I'm glad I left
With the broken lights
I was short on lines
I left my words behind

The strings are tied
Still the sand has all ran out
no, "everythings allright"
everything is cramped

In yellow lights
We come to part
you sleep so deep
(curled up) in a twisted heap.

***
And she woun't be allright,
It's too late to start this life.
It's time to face the facts.
that she woun't be stalled,
***

Everythings allright
On the day we get to part
the strings are tied too tight
The strings are tied too tight

I'm pale and faint.
With your broken jaws.
I'm out of intent.
I lost my mind in time.

***
And she woun't be stalled,
It's too late to start this life.
the sand has all run out.
It's time to see whats left.
***

Leave these bones in its seat,
They woun't steal away in your dreams.
I came down from the ceiling,
to bargain light by death.

Show me some thoughts!

songs are to understand something..they are about feelings..your songs are so complicated that i cant picture any image in my head that makes them a bit like boring..yes they might hide something else inside these lyrics but this should be in some parts of a song not ALL the song..

you havent replied to my *into the darkness* song yet i want to listen what you have to say..

cheers..

Originally Posted by zoniq

songs are to understand something..they are about feelings..your songs are so complicated that i cant picture any image in my head that makes them a bit like boring..

I think that's more to do with you than the song...
If you can only understand simple songs then he can't help that.

yes they might hide something else inside these lyrics but this should be in some parts of a song not ALL the song...

I don't think it's the song that's hiding things, I think it's your mind that's not letting you understand.


The lyrics are good, I could understand them and they're in proper sentences.

The structure's ok... Seems to be a bit dark but hey ho, I listen to Slayer.




Oh and it's NICK of time, not neck

Hehe... Thank you guys for sharing your opinions with me! If you could imagine the theme to be a mixture of "the amazing sound of an orgy" and "The clock (acousticly)" (songs by radiohead and thom yorke..

The lyrics is quite simple, and, yes, about death..

I stopped listening to Radiohead at OK Computer.
Anything after that and Thom started getting pretentious.

Hmm.. I thought Pablo Honey was crap, and everything by that point is stuff i'm really into.

Pablo Honey and The Bends were good alt. rock albums and Ok Computer was a good mix of Rock and experimental... Anything after that and (IN MY OWN OPINIONS) thom started getting weird

Ok.. thats fine with me.. We are just into different genres.. KID A and Amnesiac are experimental.. pluss thom yorkes voice impåroved quite a bit from pablo to bends

Hello.. edit is just finished..

I'm glad I left
With the broken lights
I was short on lines
I left my words behind

The strings are tied
Still the sand has all ran out
no, "everythings allright"
everything is cramped

In yellow lights
We come to part
you sleep so deep
(curled up) in a twisted heap.

***
And she woun't be allright,
It's too late to start this life.
It's time to face the facts.
that she woun't be stalled,
***

Everythings allright
On the day we get to part
the strings are tied too tight
The strings are tied too tight

I'm pale and faint.
With your broken jaws.
I'm out of intent.
I lost my mind in time.

***
And she woun't be stalled,
It's too late to start this life.
the sand has all run out.
It's time to see whats left.
***

Leave these bones in its seat,
They woun't steal away in your dreams.
I came down from the ceiling,
to bargain light by death.

I've always found that death's can be a touchy subject when it comes to writing, but you portrayed it pretty well.

The edit looks good, I liked the choruses most. Nice!