December

DECEMBER

Falling snow its grown so cold

Slowly passing december

Things i know being erased snow is falling to take there place

Covering them so i won't remember

Breathing in exhail warm breath on my skin

Just getting through this winter

This log cabben the first of many goodbys

coming this december

Questioning fate as the cold makes me shake

Standing by the last of the embers

/ I know you eyes so blue but all have gone for the winter

Just me and snow with nowhere to go

Left so alone we remain here

And paper things thought and dreams

Also likly to linger/

Little snow flakes fall in shapes

Freezing tears upon our face

Serching for warmth to melt the ice away

Find whats hidden deep inside what the snow has to hide

What it has made surrender

My tired words and these dancing flames

Fill this endless december

/ I know you eyes so blue but all have gone for the winter

Just me and snow with nowhere to go

Left so alone we remain here

And paper things thought and dreams

Also likly to linger/

So i'll see you eyes so blue

I'm closing the doors for the winter

Goodbye snow i have to go

Its much to cold i surrender

I'll leave my paper things and dancing dreames

When i say goodbye to december

thank you very much i am glad you enjoyed it

You are a fabulous songwriter! Go and get a record company!

5/5

NO SURPRISE

thanks if i new what to do or where to go i would get a reacord company but i am not sure the next move

if anyone knows what i can or should do to get a leblle plz tell me

Hmm, I enjoyed reading the first half page, then it started to bore me... Maybe you should shorten it down... up to you.. to me it looks like the first half page is the actual song and the other half being there to make it longer and to fill up empty space...
not saying that this is not good work

please make something MORE interesting, you need to get a little (im really exhagirating) more creative (way more).

lol ok give me an idea and i do it =-)

thats a stupid thing to say.. make your own ideas.. be creative.. making a text takes time

ok first off it was a joke between me and him cause hes always saying to do something weird like how to kill your mom in three days and for your info i got plenty of ideas thanks so next time you get all giddy and decided you want to jump into someone elses conversation do me a favor and don't

not to be mean =-)

hmm.. I didnt get all giddy if you want to know, dont worry... sorry for being picky, but this is a topic, not a private conversation... you do actually confuse people. well at least me.

ok i don't confuse you i like you you got some good poems anyways thanks for the comment about this one but i don't think i want to shorten it i tryed but then it feels like its missing something when i do

yes sure.. you are the man in charge, its good that you dont just blindly let someone else tell you what to do .. thanks for telling me you like me.. haha, please comment to my other song (amoniac).. seems like the link is dead

ya ok i will and welcome

this is still one of my fav

Originally Posted by 4 shades of reason

lol ok give me an idea and i do it =-)

Don't listen to them. Its good, needs some work, not shorter, if anything longer and go deeper into certain ideas and tie it all together.
I like it, not boring at all. Just because these guys aren't reading a song about something dark, depressing and evil"ish" doesn't make it boring at all.

thanks alot what u mean by deaper in what part or what do u mean

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