How does it feel to be a survivor?

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  1. xMargoot said:

    Default How does it feel to be a survivor?

    How does it feel ?
    How do you survive when everything came down?
    Look to the people who have it much worse
    Now how does it feel to be a survivor
    When surviving means you’ve got to lose

    Are laughs allowed today?
    Can you have something more to say?
    But even then, smiles fade away
    Cause you can’t not care ,on a day like today
    I try to compare
    My misery is so pathetic
    While someone’ else struggles to stay alive
    I’m thinking about giving up
    While someone’ else doesn’t get enough time
    I simply waste mine

    Will it all change tomorrow?
    People move on and choose different roads to follow
    Right now you don’t believe
    You don’t believe in life,
    you don’t believe some day it’s going to get better
    Now you only see things you despite

    I saw them in other light
    They were pushed down by life
    Eyes pointed too the ground
    Black shades all around
    Forced in this situation
    I felt I didn’t belong
    Tears are rolling down with hesitation
    Where is the justice in this
    Cause everything seems so wrong

    I saw them in other light
    Their confidence got shone out
    Everything they used to be about
    Suddenly didn’t count
    the stars in their eyes were gone
     
  2. texter-bernd said:

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    Well, the rhymes are somewhat messy, and the structure is, too. The rhyming schema would look like this:
    X X X X
    A A A A X X X X B B
    A A X X X X
    X X A A B C B X C
    X A A A X

    'X' means: no rhyme. Could be(come) rap, but even then ...

    I tend to rather strict structures and rhyming patterns. Though not rhyming each line can make a song more interesting some kind of structure should be there - IMO. Since I have written a song with the same title (which is why I stumbled over your post), I might use it as an example, actually an example for a rather loose rhyming schema:

    how does it feel?

    How does it feel to live in dirt and filth?
    How does it feel to have a drunken mother?
    How does it feel to have the rats as pets?
    How does it feel if you don't know your father?

    Each day the dice are thrown anew,
    each day the cards are dealt again.
    Who'd take your chances if not you?
    If you're not lucky - try again!

    How is it eating from a silver dish?
    How does it feel when you're the best at school?
    How does it feel when you get all you wish
    and everything's falling in your lap?

    Each day the dice are thrown anew,
    each day the cards are dealt again.
    Yesterday's winners may be today's fools.
    But who could keep you from tryin' again?
     
  3. xMargoot said:

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    You're right, I don't usually pay much attention to the rhyming schema. I just wrote what felt right. But I will try to pay attention on it, thank you. x