the first song ive written

hi im 16 and this is the first song ive ever written so what do you think of it

No soul in my Veins

Verse 1

Help me god now
I've lost my way in this life
no direction
no soul inside my veins
save my life here

Dont take my heart!!!!!



Chorus

Take my hand now
save me from this darkness
Take my hand now
save me from this darkness

No one hears me
im alone in this waste
please dont leave me
take me from this life now

(repeat)

Verse 2

Thee lost live here
no other home to find
dont let me
take you down to there
you know we are together
and we will beat this beast

Chorus

Take my hand now
save me from this darkness
Take my hand now
save me from this darkness

No one hears me
im alone in this waste
please dont leave me
take me from this life now

(repeat)

Verse 3(heavy Guitar)

we'll send them all away
we wont be beaten down
take this blade away
and don't give in to them

Were all just stuck in here

they're all resigned to die


Chorus

Take my hand now
save me from this darkness
Take my hand now
save me from this darkness

No one hears me
im alone in this waste
please dont leave me
take me from this life now

(repeat)

Verse 4

bottle up your rage now
dont let it burn you through
prove us that your better
that you wont fall to power
and everyone thats fake

Chorus

Take my hand now
save me from this darkness
Take my mind now
Fight from all this evil

No one hears me
im alone in this waste
please dont leave me
take me from this life now

Take my hand now
save me from this darkness
take my mind now
Fight from all this evil

This is very good for your first time, usually people are willing to match every line in their song and plus it has a good meaning which makes it more better.