Four Lives, One Rubik's Cube, You've Got Three Hours Kid

Hi, I'm new to these forums, first time posting. Let me know what you think of this poem I just wrote. If you love it tell me, if you hate it tell me. Thanks guys.


Your good at getting yourself into these predicaments
With no way in and no way out
You fill your head with your ego, Then Flood it with your doubt
Then you go off yelling at everyone, but your not sure what about
But the pressures astounding, You just have to shout

Flooded with the names of victims
Leaking with the blood of your jealousy
Your speechless, Thoughtlessly ambitious
Your intentions are unmistakably viscous
Decisions, Incisions, Collisions
Your head is spinning, It seems endless
But you just keep walking in the same direction
Towards the light, Towards her forgiveness

Even in your certainty you were mistaken
Lost, Wandering upon the thoughts of deceit
Balancing the weight with a nail and a bread crumb
You stepped on the wrong side, It all came crashing down
Objective failed, Purpose found

Wow I Really like it! I love the title too. It really caught my attention. Keep up the good work!

I really really like this. You used good wording and really connected. Check out mine if you get a chance but besides that man keep more coming its really good

Wow. I am amazed

Thanks for the positive comments guys, I'll try to put more of my stuff on here.

as always, i loved it.great work hunny bunny. I'll see you tomorrow and I'll bring cough syrup with me ^-^