cheap liqure in a rundown motel

~please comment. I'd like some criticism and opinions ^-^~

reach for the pen and notebooks, it's time to sink some ships.
it's all fell apart, and it's come down to this.
empty blank paper and pens full of ink.
this is the last relationship i'll sink.
this is the last, i won't take any more.
this promise ship has seen anything but a golden shore.
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so say your sins and cut your prayers.
save your cheap sex for the strip poker players.
I'm done with you, a final time, it's true.
so go ahead, and admit your death.
slit your throat all the way through.
bring back the memories, soaked in blood.
we're bringin' down lives,
we'll bury them in mud
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bring me your will so i can forge your signature.
oh baby we were just destined to kill each other.
loving the pain we caused.
just for a moment where it's paused.
and through our tears and last breaths we said our

goodbyes.
and in our dieing hours, we realized our love was a lie

Hefty stuff, and good. I like it, the mood comes across well.
The title seems to have nothing much to do with the lyrics but adds a desolate touch quite nicely. I assume you mean "liquor".

"it's all fell apart" - shouldn't that read "fallen"

Great! Keep going!

Bernd

sometimes i like to use my lack of better spelling in my writing. i think the imperfections are what i like about it.it makes it sound like it came from a person, not a computer. as much as i don't want to use a quote from another band's lyrics, the quote "well, i want to make things right but it's the wrongs that make the words come to life" -thanks for the memories by fall out boy works fairly well for my point. I'm not sure if it's dead on but oh well, it gets the point across. thanks for the review and judgment! ^-^