check it, feedback aprecciated.

This is a song meant to be a collaboration of a rapper for the first two verses and an RnB singer with a nice higher voice for the chorus and last verse.


(Chorus)
I am often at the hot spots
I like to hang out a lot
Especially with my new girl
Cause I like everything she's got
She knows how to break it down
There ain't no better chick around
When I'm with her I go crazy
Fellaz ask and I tell them she is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady

(Verse 1)
My lady does whatever I like
If she doesn't she can take a hike
I never have to worry bout that
I don't stick around just to chat
I take her out wherever she want to go
I knockout anyone who call her a ho
We like to hit up the club
Damn my money fills up a tub
All heads lookin' when we enter through the door
And she drop it right there down to the floor
My lady knows just how to move
When we're together I'm in the groove
I know exactly what to expect from her
When she move her body I only see a blur
All the guys be checkin' out my chick
But she roll wit me cuz I'm oh so slick

(Chorus)
I am often at the hot spots
I like to hang out a lot
Especially with my new girl
Cause I like everything she's got
She knows how to break it down
There ain't no better chick around
When I'm with her I go cr azy
Fellaz ask and I tell them she is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady

(Verse 2)
I can't believe she is so pretty
Definitely the best in the city
I can't believe she looks so good
Found her somewhere in the hood
Every other chick wants to be in her spot
Anything thing she wants can be bought
She love the way I look with the Nike
Lookin so fly in my white tee
Anything she want she already got
Gettin some Patron 300 a shot
As soon as we get out on the dance floor
Damn this shorty makin me roar
I'm an animal and I'm gettin hungry
I wanna eat her she's lookin yummy
I give her whatever she can take
And in return she let's me swim in her lake

(Chorus)
I am often at the hot spots
I like to hang out a lot
Especially with my new girl
Cause I like everything she's got
She knows how to break it down
There ain't no better chick around
When I'm with her I go crazy
Fellaz ask and I tell them she is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady

(RnB Verse)
My lady gets only the best
She's the finest chick in the west
She can dance she can sing
My girl is the very best thing
I like my cars I like my money
but most of all I like my honey
This girl is the love of my life
I'm so glad she let me inside

(Chorus)
I am often at the hot spots
I like to hang out a lot
Especially with my new girl
Cause I like everything she's got
She knows how to break it down
There ain't no better chick around
When I'm with her I go crazy
Fellaz ask and I tell them she's my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady
She is my lady

thts pretty good get in a collabo and tht would go hard as hell...............got sum killa lines in there too

yo would you hit up my song its called when push comes ta shove i need ta kno whether itz good or not................tha subject is\ a rap i made please give me feedback \ would really appreciate it

thanks man i wanna sell it to some rapper. me and my friend have our own group, but we do comedy songs. our name is ewag, thats where that name comes from. but ya we can write real songs, but were a couple of white kids from oregon so we cant really do the whole serious rap thing. but thanks for the comment.

everyone who reads this should comment and tell me what they think of it.

generic predictable and cliched

yes i know it is cliched. but it was the first serious song ive written, and i figured it was a good place to start.

sorry you're right its not a bad lyric-but will it stand out?-you're structure is excellent-have you put the lyric to music yet?.

yes me and my friend have recorded it

this actually is a pretty gud start for ur first serious song

thank you so much. there are some lines in here that im pretty proud of. but seriously thanks a lot.

ok really if you read this, comment on it. i won't get hurt feelings if you don't like it

ewag and arab


yalls **** is pretty intense

lets all do sum **** together

sounds good. send me somethin to work with and ill write somethin

Here this kid goes and I see his work,yet I'm not impressed
Take my advice,help yourself you seem worked and stressed
I'm not rich of famous,except I define talent and balance
I work so hard at what I do,I should have my own fan base
Truly admit this is how it should be done,yet I do it so I win
Read it please,note down something and lets end.

Sorry just had to do a freestyle.

Originally Posted by redmoon

generic predictable and cliched

Two thumbs Up. But isn't most mainstream rap the same way? So I like it for that reason

what you want the song to be about man.i really don't have any ideas except 4 a break up song bro.i mostly do freestyles and r&b type sht man

write whatever and ill work with it. im pretty flexible about this type of stuff