another song, feedback always welcomed

So this is a rap about comin up from nothin (kinda cliched, but every rapper has at least one of these). The verses are deffinately meant to be rapped, but the chorus could either be rapped or sang higher, depending on who's singin it. Collaboration or just solo, either would work. Tell me whatcha think .


(Chorus)
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner

(Verse 1)
I'm tryin to rise up from nowhere
I'll make it to the top I swear
I'm about to take the whole game by storm
The whole damn thing about to transform
About to enter a whole new age
Reachin the end gotta turn the page
I'm sick of earnin minimum wage
So now the whole world is my stage
Growin up in a household that don't like rap
It's just that much harder to get on the map
I just can't take all of this crap
Now all the girls wanna sit on my lap
Probly none of you heard about me before now
But after this you're wonderin how
I am a winner thats what I do
Everyone knows I'm great now you do too

(Chorus)
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner

(Verse 2)
All my life I've been brought down
All my life I've been the clown
But now I'm finally buildin up renown
Soon I'll be the one wearin the crown
All these other playas got nothin on me
You got one girl I got like three
Every time you see me I got a different chick
The first thing you notice is that they're thick
Compared to me everyone sound like Dr. Seuss
Compared to me everyone sound obtuse
Your probly wonderin how I do it
Your probly wonderin why I did not quit
I didn't quit and I never will
I still got a promise I gotta fulfill
I can't give up even though I already won
And now you know you've just been outdone

(Chorus)
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner

(Verse 3)
Bein a winner is how I roll
Without me rap just wasn't whole
I will not stop till I reach my goal
The world will be mine to control
There are parts of my past I was I could redo
If I could take it back I'd still be with you
But I can't and now your gone forever
Tried to act tough just said whatever
Now your wishin you could have me back
Chasin me like your runnin track
You can't get me I'm the hardest to catch
You and me we just aren't a match
But enough with all this past thinkin
It's time to get back to the fact that you stinkin
I just wanted you to know I am a winner
Go try to copy me I heard you are a printer

(Chorus)
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
Oh, I like to go fast
Yeah, I got my foot on the gas
Look out cause I'll beat your ***
Leavin you in my past
Cause I'm a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner
I am a winner
A a a winner

Seriously people should comment and tell me what they think....

If you read and liked, comment telling me so. If you read and didn't like, comment and tell why you didn't please.

this is a good rap lyric it has distinctive rythms

what do you mean by that?

this is nice, i culd sing ur chorus too and i have to say dat dis song comes together nicely

thank you. i think this song is much better than my other one.

comment if you read this

haha its hard to get any feedback here dude
and yea i like it its not my style of music but its still good got some good lines in there
check out mine if yah got the chance

yes ive really noticed that
but thanks for actually tellin me you liked the song
ill look at yours

everybody who reads this should comment and tell me what they think.