Reveiw my (horrible) song

Wrote this in ten minutes... let me know what you think.


Well here we are at the party,
that your sorry *** dragged me to,
I wish I could say that out loud
but I like having sex with you.
Sometimes the truth hurts,
and we all know thats so true,
so heres a little something
I think should be told to you.


Everybody hates you everybody hates you,
busybody hates you, everybody hates you
everybody hates you, everybody hates you,
yes they do.

I noticed how they smile,
but their eyes still seem cold as ice
and notice how the ex cheer leading squad
seems to be avoiding your eyes.

because everybody hates you everybody hates you,
everybody hates you, everybody hates you
everybody hates you, everybody hates you
yes they do.

Even your old principal
seem to hate your guts,
It wouldn't surprise me,
if you drove him f_ing nuts

because everybody hates you everybody hates you,
everybody hates you, everybody hates you
everybody hates you, everybody hates you
yes they do...

But that's okay.... Cuz I do to...

because everybody hates you, your parents really hate you,
your dentist really hates you, your hamster really hates you, your boss really hates you, your brother really hates you, your postman really hates you, your hairdresser really hates you, and I do to....


Because everyone hates you, they really really hate you, everyone hates you... and God does too... he f_ing hates you... and I do too... I'm breaking up with you... cuz everybody hates you.

No talent right?

sound good if is not about love but ı dont like this kind of lyrics, doesn't matter your NOT LOVE song isn't bad

The first 4 lines don't fit. Otherwise the text is okay and spending a few more minutes might do it good.

Cheers,
Bernd