another rap, feedback please

i listen to kanyeezy young jeezy and weezy
but if they rap battled meezy id destroy them easy
mainstream riders make they names on the TV
i make my name cuz im sick, im straight queezy
the best youll ever be is second best in the land
with the mic in your hand, i sink fools like quicksand, command
them to eat my dust, then bust their lust for the game
cuz number one is a must, so baby show no shame
skewered is the name, into the game i came
the same dame who took your crazy and made it tame
my frame of mind is outside of that pish-posh box
when the opportunity knocks i have never smoked rock
yet i walk, talk, and rock like the new slick rick
the clock tick ticks and i remain the most sick
so fall back quick cuz ill bash you for kicks
stay out of the mix, im the lakers and you are the knicks
got plenty of tricks up my sleeve, so you better leave
cuz you better believe all my rhymes are carefully weaved, percieve
the game with more than a pair of blind eyes
otherwise you abousta get fried like french fries
and splattered like tye-dye, so bye-bye, dont even try
you aint even fly, and that aint no lie
here i lie, daydreamin about biggie and tupac
wonderin if i could become the next newpac
but no, ive never stepped foot in the ghetto
im from shelby meadows, and i got a nice falsetto
in addition to flow, and i tie it with a lyrical bow
you dont even know, they say you reap what you sow
if so, then someday i will rule the land and demand
the bland music to forever be banned
i fanned every batter that stepped into the box
i drained a J with two seconds left on the clock
i socked boxers and sent em into a state of shock
i mock jocks rockin my high socks and reeboks
stay away, dont say you reppin the south
when all i hear is little words being pushed through a big mouth
so if you got a big mouth, make sure you walk the walk
if you cant handle these waters then stay on the dock
cuz im a croc, i advise you to keep that in mind
i unwind the ties that bind and leave you behind
i signed a contract telling me to stay on my grind
and then i shined, and then my stars became aligned
all yall in the crowd, go ahead and place bets
on the stage im a seargeant dueling cadets
ill leave you mentally damaged, give you turrets
youll be caught in my nets, so if you wanna step, lets.

im a winner, i eat emcee bones for dinner
im a beginner, but already a poetic killer
im a bone chiller and a page filler, face it, im iller
than any sinner who has ever stepped foot on this planet
ill board your ship of destiny and then i will man it
and land it on the shores of runner-up, second place
so dont chase first place, ive already won the race
and put mace to the face of those who wanna trace my style
all the while im drinkin dew out of the vial
to reach my level youll have to fly for miles
call me kyle, xy, cuz im outta this world
just give me a beat and watch magic enfurl
yo yo all of you girls, just blow me... a kiss
now sit down, open your ears and listen to this

this is really good, i like how it flows, its got rythm...also i really like some of your metaphores, overall its pretty tight

its good but to many made up words