On the edge ( PLS comment, my first lyrics i wanna hear some comments THX!!)

Love is fragile
Everything beautiful dies

I am the evidence
Sorrow is real

There's no justice..
Just an maze between my ears

It's raining ****,
and i'm drowning

I'm lost in life,
it's all in my head

I'm lost in despair,
let me go...

What's on the other side?
Beyond the life's scenery

I just want to die
I just want to die

I'm Beyond the veil,
and there's no way back.

comeon!!! some comments plx
u probably think: blah.... too cliche.. and " looks like your life sucks, ****"
i've made 5 songs already and ill post em too if u want

yo
wat genre is dat homie
it really aint a song
its more like a poem that dont rhyme thats why you aint gettin no replys

Not too much so as to lose meaning:


Love is fragile
Everything beautiful dies

I am evidence that
Sorrow is real

There's no justice..
Just torment in my mind

It's raining ****,
and I'm drowning

In life's reality, I am lost,
Life is only in my thoughts

I'm lost in despair,
Let me go... *

What's on the other side?
Beyond life's scenery

I just want to die
I just want to die

I've gone too far,
And there's no way back.

* or as Queen said in the song title - I Want To Be Free!!

Originally Posted by sdbbMIXTAPE-KING

yo
wat genre is dat homie
it really aint a song
its more like a poem that dont rhyme thats why you aint gettin no replys

i was thinking about funeral doom / goth metal.. it might fit

yeah it would fit for metal
i aint into metal tho man
i rap homie