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Taken from a track called Koncept, Please submit any comments, good or bad, thanks

Dukey B is not me,
I am Just a Koncept,
a Visionary of all omissions,
and/now* thats Hard to accept,
When I leave this life and Find a Higher Place to Dwell
all I could Ever say*... I did it all for the Hard Sell.
Soft Cell...only mere Mortal,
So I sit back and wait for this all ta,
blow over, Duck and Cover,
I made this shell a Shelter.
Cos inside burned the fire
so hot it could melt ya
my soul began to swelter,
In a Concrete Jungle,
It'd make all hell Break loose,
Stampede to the flow
and I spared the Abuse
But whats a Rope with No noose?
Hang ya head in shame,
We be pointing fingers,
but who's really to Blame?

Good rhyming, Dukey. Rap song? Would be perfect but could also be in any other type song in my opinion. You also mentioned one of my favorite songs "Concrete Jungle" by Bob Marley (the DJ mix). Check it out!

Originally Posted by Dukey B

Taken from a track called Koncept, Please submit any comments, good or bad, thanks

Dukey B is not me,
I am Just a Koncept,
a Visionary of all omissions,
and/now* thats Hard to accept,
When I leave this life and Find a Higher Place to Dwell
all I could Ever say*... I did it all for the Hard Sell.
Soft Cell...only mere Mortal,
So I sit back and wait for this all ta,
blow over, Duck and Cover,
I made this shell a Shelter.
Cos inside burned the fire
so hot it could melt ya
my soul began to swelter,
In a Concrete Jungle,
It'd make all hell Break loose,
Stampede to the flow
and I spared the Abuse
But whats a Rope with No noose?
Hang ya head in shame,
We be pointing fingers,
but who's really to Blame?

Don't normally Do this but decided to post the whole version of this song...Koncept...love or hate...it's all good...

Koncept – Written to Lil wayne – Shoot me down

Verse 1
Dukey B is not me,
I am Just a Koncept,
I'mma* a Visionary of all omissions,
make it Hard to accept,**
When I leave this life
and Find a Higher Place to Dwell
all I could Ever* say**
... it* was all for the Hard Sell.
Soft Cell...only mere Mortal,
So I sit back, wait for this all ta,
blow over, Duck and Cover,
I made/make* this shell a Shelter.
Cos inside burned the fire
so hot it could melt ya
my soul began to swelter,
and with that...I'll give you something to yell ta*

Verse 2
In a Concrete Jungle,
It'd make all hell Break loose,
Stampede to the flow
and I spared* you from* the Abuse**
but...whats a Rope with No noose?
Hang ya head in shame,
We be pointing fingers,
but* who's really to Blame?
Is it* Bin Laden?
or is it* Bush?,
I 'spose it's only
in God we trust...In me I trust
In the Race for Humans,
there's only Us,
There's no winner, just competition,
To* be on top of the Food chain*
I'm the Definition...
The be all, end all
is who I Be, and
Forever I am Dukey B...
(fade out)
Now **** with Me**

Verse 3
My Vocabulary is establishment
of How I Sustain,
Should I refrain from leaving a stain,
which/it* shall forver remain...
Permenant resident....
within your membrane
Or will my words reverbarate
And echo a sound of Injustice
In Just this I take a Verbal Knife...and then twist
Delivery of perfection, a divine intervention
Couldn't save you,
but* I i'll/ Offer you protection,
Under the wings of this angel,
I'll make it my mission
For one last time, this is it,
it's my Vision...they'll diminish
I'm finished...
(fade out) man I'm Finished

Big up, Dukey B.

I feel it.

this is really good