rap song, comments are GREATLY appreciated

i wrote this song to a specific beat. its hard to read lyrics to a song and be able to read it exactly how its supposed to be delivered in terms of flow, timing, etc, but i assure you the whole song does flow smoothly



mr. overdramatic the love addict who's had it who's mad at
the world, cuz he's bad with girls, its so tragic
in his mind, he feels the ties that bind, tightening
some think his mind's only confined to rhymes
but inside, there is confusion, uncertainty, delusion
its hard to find happiness inside seclusion
he's using his words to the best of his abilities
but sometimes it seems like he's speaking in soliloquies
jumping up and down, like how low can these ceilings be?
but he should just stand still and let it be, you feelin me?
he walks around with an invisible chip on his shoulder
a boulder, his heart will either get colder or smoulder
he liked a girl and told her, they went on some dates
but to his dismay he was cheated on by fate
when he started to lose her, he told her he loved her
now he feels like a loser but he keeps his scars covered
you aint gotta see what he's suffered

he sees people holding hands, hugging and kissing
he walks through the halls with a part of his soul missing
he wears his heart on the sleeve of a blood red t-shirt
look closely, you can see it, and he can see her
the girl with the eyes and the smile and the face
and the style and the waist he desires to embrace
her but face-to-face he cant find the words to say
its a disgrace, and he knows it, his tries are all a waste
erased the "V" in "love" and wrote in an "N"
put an "A" before the "l", its you and me till the end
says the lonely man to his shadow, his only friend
the shadow's a mere puppet, she cant comprehend
the fact that the lonely man would doubtlessly leave her
if he ever met a real girl, theres no room for three here
i feel like the shadow, i didnt see it coming
a blind man running towards a silent train chugging
down the railroad of life, love, sweet-talking and hugging
she had my heart, she had all of me, we really had something
then she left me behind, and she left behind nothing

Great lyrics. awesome track, and I can imagine the flow with perfect delivery.

thank you very much