please tell me wat u think of my lyrics-im begging u - pleaseeeeeeee

its called Young Hearts



Darkness everywhere
The world isn't fair
Bombs going off somewhere

Sadness creeping into young hearts
Because of war and death
Makes you forget of all the good times once shared

And people live in fear
Because of the men with guns
No one will ever be the same again
Oh, who is the one to blame?
(For this?)

Soldiers will feel the effects of war
Civilian's will wear the consequences
A nation will lose it's pride
The world will have nothing to gain
(At all)

Sadness creeping into young hearts
Because of war and death
Makes you forget of all
The good times once shared

It's always sad to see a child all alone
Crying over their mother's dead body
A sense of sadness in society
Are you so cold hearted to let the war go on?

Sadness creeping into young hearts
Because of war and death
Makes you forget of all
The good times once shared

Darkness everywhere
The world just isn't fair
Bombs flying everwhere

[END]


copyright 2009 luke haze

it's very poetic, what is the tempo and sound?

very good
mainly dah first and second bars

u fink u can rite me some love rap bars
cuz aint so good at it

if yh send um to me at turbo1956@live.co.uk

I absolutely love it, i wish i could write like that,you should definitely write some more

It's nice to see lyrics that aren't about boyfriend/girlfriend relationships and stuff...way to keep it fresh