hey guys and girls i was wondering wat you guys thing of my new rap song i made and was wondering if you could give me some pointers. umm im white and puerto rican and wanted to get in to the rap game and not sure if race played a role in it. well here i go

MAN YOU HAVE THESE MUTHA ****AS THINKIN THEY HAWT WITH THERE FAGGOT *** SET
WELL IM TELL EM LIKE DIS
IGHT WELL U A FAGGOT CAUSE UR HOME BOYZ ARE MAGGOTS.
YOU REMIND OF BOB SAGGOT whos stuck in traffic.
RUN BE FOR I CLICK CLACK THIS 9 at five.
YEAH WHEN I COME THROW YOUR HOOD IN MY ESCALATE UR DEAD MATE.
YOU JUST MET YOU FATE.
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
MY 9 IS JUST FINE
YOUR GURL IS GUNNA BE MINE
REMBER THIS 9 IS MINE
YOU BETTER LEARN HOW TO STOP TIME
remeber
I DIDNT GET SIGNED. IM DISRESPECT YOU AND YO SET
YOU SHOULDNT HAVE MADE THIS BET. NOW YOU LOOK LIKE ****.
GO BUY A CLIP. MATTER FACT GO GET FIT.
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
YEAH YOU A FAKE *** *****. YOU PROBLY A SNITCH.
***** GO DIE IN A DITCH. YOU GUTTA BE ON THIS
SSSK ****... SHOOT SHOOT STAB KILL HOMIE.
DONT BEG SHOOT THEM IN THE LEGS. THEN DRINK THAT KEG.
FIDDY WONT STOP BALLIN BUT THAT ***** JAY CANT STOP CALLIN.
FAT JOE IS A ****IN ***. HE NEEEDS TO GO ON SOME JENNY CRAIG.
SOULJA BOY IS A ****ING TOY WHO CANT UNDER STAND WHY HIS RECORD SALES
ARE FROM LIL BOYs.
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
***** only the strong survive you anit gut 9 lives.
i anit gunna lie your gurl is KIND OF bi and i no why. yeah i feel good
every day cause you look gay.
you an industry ***** think you bigga but ull rethink that when i pull this trigga.
man ima be like p.diddy and show no piddy cause i anit so widdy.
i cant deal with this beef. east side , west side, south side. man it dont matter
**** soulja boy he reminds me of the jonas brother. they just a bunch of ****as
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
sorry nick i ****ed miley first ... why you think shes all ways smiley.
i ****ed miley, demi , all in my chevi. joe jonas needs a bonus
**** hes gunna be home less.
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
now for the studio gangsta's
you have the game and wanye they all just lame and a shame.
****ers killed hip hop but ima revive it cause you guys deprived it.
i dont bang cause i dont need a gang. ahah
young weezy neeeds an enhaler while this bullet impal's ya
i cant handle this **** with fake *** rappers. lil wayne will need cocaine to
away this payne. ima give you the benefit of the doubt.
my life was ight but you was only in the chorus cause ur lyrical poor ness.
your song i feel like dieing makes me feel like crying. my ears are bleeding
and your still teathing.
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )
man what **** is with young buck. he better duck be for i let hammer fly or else hes gunna die.
the only ***** that stayed to his rutes was fiddy and he can kill diddy
im done bein silly. aha **** wanyes world it makes me wanna ****in hurle ,
ricky rossy thinks hes bossy but i think he crazy.
man that ***** tony yayo will make you leave with a halo.
loyld banks dont need tanks to say thanks. but that ***** game is just ****ing lame .
you said u were in a gang but you anit gunna bang. ima leave you off with this
the game has changed and i anit the one to blame
lil wanye claimed the fame i should of claimed
yeah you cant handle my name cause soulja boy is the one to BE in SHAME
lil wanye cant handle my swag he's a fag who cant bag
kanye west anit the best cause he cant progress.
common would be bombin while you guys be fallin
so step off lil homie befor you look like a foonie
cause your ****ing homley homie.
fiddy be silly cause im so widdy
soulja boy is to kiddy but should i have piddy?
nah ima be like p.diddy and show no piddy.
yeah!!!!!
CHORUS
(why you screwin your face at me ima stay on my grime cause its wartime and i aint ready to die )