I really don`t know anything about lyrics... But this is something I wrote about some bad memories I had to get thru..Still missin a werse or two.. Please critique and comment!

I took a bite of concrete with his feet in my face
I took a bite of a memory I could never erase
I took a bite of a demon true human-desgrace.
Redrocks redrocks you can never escape

I took a bite of a story of so many whimen untold.
I took a bite of a piece of him that to the devil was sold
I took a bite of what my coming future was to hold-
the true poison of a fairytale so total and cold.

Redrocks you chaine, red rocks you draine, red rocks is your true and utter cocaine
red rocks you shame, red rocks you sustaine. Red rocks will take you down far on the very next train.
Redrocks you obtaine, redrocks you insane,red rocks is the emptyness that on you constantly rain
redrocks you paine, redrocks you blame, but can’t you see you`r the master of your own domaine.