And They F*cked

Any comments/suggestions are greatly appreciated. I really hope this doesn't get removed:

Version 1:
[And They F*cked:


Little Timmy had a crush
A crush that made his stomach turn to mush

And everyone disguised it as Love
For the same reason they wore clothes
For the same reason they had bedroom curtains
For the same reason they locked the bathroom door

His parents loved each other, and they were more than best friends because they f*cked
His neighbors loved each other and they were more than best friends because they f*cked
His sister and her boyfriend loved each other and they were more than best friends because they f*cked

Little Timmy had a crush
A crush that made his stomach turn to mush
And Little Timmy had a p*nis
And Little Sussy had a v*gina
And they called it love
And like that they lived
And one day Little Sussy was pregnant
And that day, it wasn’t love
That day Little Timmy’s p*nis had served it’s purpose
And Little Sussy was almost done with hers
And they divorced
And Little Timmy wrote a break-up poem
And Little Sussy wrote a break-up poem
And all of the masses in all of the land related to those break-up poems
And one day Little Timmy met Little not-Sussy
And they f*cked
And they called it love
And Little not-Sussy was pregnant
And they divorced because their bodies had fulfilled their purpose
And Little Sussy did the same
But she brought her living fetus with her, from horny guy to horny guy
And their cycles repeated
And their cycles ended
And they died
And the history books
Mentioned Little Timmy for his enormous p*nis
And they forgot about Little Sussy, though every man loved her an*s]


Version 2:

Timmy had a crush
A crush that made his stomach turn to mush

He was told to call it love
For the same reason
Clothes were worn
And bedroom curtains were never torn

From his shattered bedroom window he would watch
Malevolent snakes slither and stiffen
In the presence of furry neighborhood kittens
The animal games and Scotch bottles
They’d fly full throttle
And the wails and screeches evolved from meows and hisses

Little Timmy had a crush
A crush that made his blood rush
From head to penis
A crush that made Little Sussy’s blood rush
From head to vagina

And that was love
And like that they lived
Through the forlorn
Emotional winter storms
Little Sussy had a glow to her
A growth to her
So fantastic she felt
With her tightening belt

Little Timmy felt uneasy
And feelings evolved into actions
And Sussy’s heart was left in fractions

And that was nature
And like that he left
A family uncreated
And a fetus unborn





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So, let me know what you think of version 2! I'm rather bipolar when it comes to the level of euphemism in my poetry—as I'm sure you've noticed.

Um,this is gross,yet interesting.Please don't be offended.

Humans aren't the cleanliest of animals, and, if you felt those emotions, I accomplished what I set-out to do

Thanks for the feedback!

And They F*cked = Poetry?!

lol

The grossness aside, I most certainly hope you don't seriously believe there's nothing in between the title and "they died"

Originally Posted by Spring

And They F*cked = Poetry?!

lol

The grossness aside, I most certainly hope you don't seriously believe there's nothing in between the title and "they died"

I figured that I'd write something that every person in the world could unwillingly relate to in some way or form. Though, I don't consider it to be poetic as far as rhyming goes.

Thank you for the feedback!

Hi,are you jason.He wrote this exact same thing in his poem "hi there"

Originally Posted by Paris13

Hi,are you jason.He wrote this exact same thing in his poem "hi there"

I am not. But, I'll look into. If he did copy my poem I will prosecute him with the full extent of the law : )

This was really good, a very nice subject to write about.