Please comment on this song i wrote for the girl i like

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  1. ben2012 said:

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    Hey everybody, i was hoping you all could tell me what you think of this song i wrote for the girl i like. Also, i want to post this on facebook but i'm kinda afraid of what my friends would say and also the girl i wrote this for is one of my friends. I have this reputation of this kinda stoic emotionless guy so i have a reputation to worry about. So if you think i should let me know.

    Leap of Faith

    It’s time to be what you say
    When it’s time to play
    The games we play

    When we talk and flirt
    And say we would never hurt
    What we have

    But why not
    What have we to lose
    We must ignore what we’ve been taught
    And do what we feel
    Do what we choose
    Not what we’ve been told

    Take my hand
    And don’t let go
    Follow me into the dark
    We will form a band
    That can’t be broken

    Take my hand
    And hold on tight
    Were in for the ride
    Of our lives

    Take my hand
    And don’t close your eyes
    Come with me
    As we take
    Our leap of faith

    I live to see your smile
    And all the while
    I can’t help but do the same
    If that smile were to fade away
    I hope to god
    I am not to blame

    Take my hand
    And don’t let go
    Run with me
    Into the unknown
    We will do what others
    Have just spoken of

    Take my hand
    And hold on tight
    3,2,1
    Here we go
    Lets start our show

    Take my hand
    And don’t close your eyes
    Come with me
    As we take
    Our leap of faith

    Fall with me
    Until the end of time
    Of course time will never end
    As long as your by my side
    You my friend
    You my crush
    You my love.

    Take my hand
    And don’t close your eyes
    Come with me
    As we take
    Our leap of faith (repeat 3 times)
     
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    Ruderz said:

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    3,2,1
    Here we go
    Lets start our show

    This bit, I loved.

    And go for it my friend, it's always worth the shot. Your reputation is worth the risk.
    Hollywood Undead for life... <3!

    (8) And This Song is for You! (8) - This Song is for You, by me.
     
  3. ben2012 said:

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    Bump/
     
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    Paris13 said:

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    I like this song,it is really good,is it from past experiences?
     
  5. ben2012 said:

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    No not really. It's about whats going on right now
     
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    genisha said:

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    Oh,do you always write about whats going on in your life and what you feel.If so,then so do i.It seems to help me feel better.
     
  7. ben2012 said:

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    Yea, that's what i usually do or at least try to anyway