my song......please read it and see how it sounds...advise required.

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  1. Cheyenne said:

    Question my song......please read it and see how it sounds...advise required.

    You left me all alone alone on the streets, left me to fend for myself, I didn’t know, right from wrong, I was dumped out on Gladstone.

    It was very cold, freezing cold, rain was pouring down, I didn’t know what to do, I layed there and cried on the ground

    I loved you so, and you took my heart, and left me with nothing now I am alive, alive but bearly breathing

    alive but bearly breathing I have no feelings now, alive but bearly breathing please give me back my heart. Alive but bearly breathing please I need you now, alive but bearly breathing I don’t want us to split apart

    Another part, part of me, another part of me you will have, I have some love, love to give and I give it all to you.

    I want you back, back right now, even when you hurt me, you are my strength, my wholesome strength with out you I am alive but barely breathing

    alive but bearly breathing, I have no feelings now, alive but bearly breathing please give me back my heart. Alive but bearly breathing please I need you now, alive but bearly breathing I don’t want us to split apart.
     
  2. ezekkk said:

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    really cool song. I think I found the rythym, I like it. comment my song?
     
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    LyricsAngel said:

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    ♥ it
    and this goes to someone
     
  4. manu said:

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    the artist pls if i may know .....sounds an awesome song ....
     
  5. Cheyenne said:

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    I wrote that song actually.....and i have many more that i havn't posted yet....i have been thinking if i should post them or not...
     
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    LyricsAngel said:

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    Please post them, I would love to read more!
     
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    smileygal said:

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    awesome song!! i love it!! do you write music with the songs?? and this mite b weird but ur name is exactly that of a girl in yr 10 at my skool. lol i kno its weird. sorry. but yea wen are you planning to post other lyrics??
     
  8. manu said:

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    yep me too i would like to read more, so lol we are waiting and be sure that they will be written...and maybe give some comments u know some opinion.....as long as u dont mind it ...
     
  9. manu said:

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    read * dang not written but read sorryyyy lol
     
  10. m.simos said:

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    it's really good
     
  11. Cheyenne said:

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    Thanks everyone....i'll be sure to have some more posted tonight.......