My Lyrics...please tell me what you think!!! :)

Okay, these aren't the first lyrics I've written, but I really think these are going somewhere ... they're about a girl who can't get over her old boyfriend who's definitely moved on, but she hasn't. No reference to my personal life; I have a boyfriend currently, so...yeah haha! That's what it's about!

Can you see my silent plea to you in the night time sky
The hearts I've broken, wasted in their fast hopeless pursuit
The chase is timeless, lost through the ages only to you
I've got to accept that at this point, you're not coming back
But please know that those last two weeks were the best of my life
You promised and swore up and down that you'd make me your wife
So when you finally ran away, I stung like a knife
And my head's been filled with these bitter thoughts for a year now

Flying over me in your ecstasy
I'm next to nothing in your eyes
I'm not over that last text message
"I hope it works out for you"

I woke up, my heart pounding through my veins and not ceasing
It reminded me of when we watched the stars, not seeing
Why don't you say your sorries...I've got open ears for you
That one last "I love you" has been treasured and stored away
You woke me up as usual, smile melting my mind
Took me out at nine with your intents hidden all the time
Yet still I can't bring myself to stomach hatred for you
And you'll never ever find my devil in hell to pay

Flying over me in your ecstasy
I'm next to nothing in your eyes
I'm not over that last text message
"I hope it works out for you"

I can't hate you, I can hate her
Why'd you show her off to me?
"I hope that you're happy"
As invisible tears flew from my eyes

Flying over me in your ecstasy
I'm next to nothing in your eyes
I'm not over that last text message
"I hope it works out for you"
Flying over me in your ecstasy
I'm next to nothing in your eyes
I'm not over that last text message
"I hope it works out for you"

I really want to get a band and make this a song, but I'm 13 and none of my friends play the necessary instruments...just please tell me what you think!

Generally good and emotionally charged, even if it's not true but some things seemed slightly clumsy, like 'swore up and down'- is that a play on 'i swear down'?

also 'stung like a knife'- that seems weak for a knife simile, they do more than sting.

but dont forget its sick n if you can explain those lyrics, ok. just being constructive.

lyrics you've written yourself should be posted in the lyrics review forum. by the way rad song! Especially for a thirteen year old!