Forgetful Memory

I've been writing songs for a bit in my notebook and I've been looking forward to some kind of feedback. Tell me what you think.


Forget about the twilight regrets
And the wandering minds
Believe me when I want to help
And fix all the tainted insides
Turn this chapter my dear, the story’s just begun
Dive into me, see my soul for what it’s become

Hate
Hatred and pain
Cast it away or hold it
It’s all so useless
Fate
What we’ve become
Our future holds so much
Through the battle we’ll rush through, keeping ourselves insane

Atop our cliff we’ll stroke the bark
Of this tree we’ve been cutting
The shade is fading
Let the water mist around us, let the Sun shine through the fog
Have us look into our eyes and see the truth behind
Shake
Shake away
Shaking from my touch and be gone today
Wait
Wait for me
I can’t catch up if you slow down, you’re still too quick to see
Peace, peace on me
Peace on you and I, our helpless minds asleep

We’ll walk through the magic and bathe in the ocean
Sleep in the sunshine
Tell them we’re stronger
Face all the monsters and climb even higher
Leap from the top
And fly

Shapeless scents among mourning gems
Face the wind through the mocking grins
Roll on through a forgetful memory

It's ah, actually more like a soft rock song. I try to imagine it with acoustic guitar.

i really like it, i liked who you used really good language on it,
i can also imagine it as a soft rock song, its really good!

Thanks, I try to incorporate interesting word choice into my songs. It's fun to try and think of new ways to say something.