Song i just randomly wrtoe in 5 minutes, please rate

responsibility, i dont want it anymore
motivation its so stupid its a bore
aggrevation keeps me from knocking on your door
segregation is the reason that were poor
Something tells me i wont live it down to 4

GPA's so nerds and geeks can get their tricks
football players are the only guys who get their kicks
In the movie punk guys never ge their chicks

their left with their spiked hair, skinny jeans, converse, vans, and dickies

(just wrote this randomly)

this 5 mins is better than some lyrics ppl take hours over.

the first 4 lines anyway.
after that it lost rhythm n meaning
talent tho

yeah take more time next time but i think quick-random writing can be good when some thought or feeling needs to get out. Some of the best songs/poems have been written that way. Get it down on paper but then go back to it later and massage it, clean it up some.