Victimville

A nice set of lyrics portraying my home town of Victorville. If any of you know where that is.......you have my deepest apologies.

There’s nothing but nothing
Around this dead world.
The oasis from hell has made
The murderous plot unfurl.
In the distance I hear
The sound of thunder
Launching the blessing and
Tear you asunder.

The lie is apparent.
The truth is unknown.
Your will is the failure
Of all that was born.
Stay the course and see
I have the last laugh.
You wasted my time
Until time’s all I have.

Dust fills my mind while
The sun blinds my eyes,
The sweat on my brow
So hot that it’s ice.
The victim lies still
While the suspect runs free.
Alone in the ghost town
You’ll never kill me.

Every head turns to see
The one that won’t fit in,
The crosshairs focused on
A heart done wrong again.
Backed into the ditch
With no hope of salvation,
This smart little *****
Ignores reservation.

Invitation rejected
Surpassed like no other.
The threat of my life
Leaves you running for cover.
Stay the course and see
I have the last laugh.
You wasted my time
Until time’s all I have.

Dust fills my mind while
The sun blinds my eyes,
The sweat on my brow
So hot that it’s ice.
The victim lies still
While the suspect runs free.
Alone in the ghost town
You’ll never kill me.

The one place in my world
That holds some refuge
Sits condemned and destroyed
With my hopes to refuse.
Alas, all the people
Come out with their dread
To say “You won’t leave
Until you are dead.”

Stay the course.
No one laughs.
You wasted my time
Until time’s all I have.

Dust fills my mind while
The sun blinds my eyes,
The sweat on my brow
So hot that it’s ice.
The victim lies still
While the suspect runs free.
Alone in the ghost town
You’ll never kill me.

Wow that's pretty bleak reading. But I like it a lot. I felt a bit of hope creep in at the end which I liked. I think I would have liked a slight adjustment to the lyrics in the last chorus just to show a bit of progression from the writer throughout the song. Unless of course the point is that thouhg you try and try you'll forever be trapped in the place though your spirit still remains.

Nice work though thank you.