I realize this is kinda short but I wanted to get some feedback on these lyrics. Thank you for reading. If it seems kinda choppy it's because it's set to an arrangement with an odd time signature. No title as of yet.
A shallow spot to lay my head
in a sea of empty promises
low
shaking every breath I take
a convoluted sense of shame
can't I shake this low
can't I fight this pain
can't I wake up now
will I live again
no
Hang my head another day
just a slave to my mistakes
low
but I got some things to do
guess I'll just be passing through