Hi guys! I wrote a song that is going to be released soon. The problem is, that there might be some mistakes or there are things that could not be understood properly. It's written in a kind of poem style and it's about my last encouter with my ex-girlfriend before we left each other. Now here's my problem. As I'm not an english native speaker there might be mistakes or lines in the text that are wrong or incomprehensible. That's what the boss from the label assumes. I would be very thankful for every advice you give regarding the lyrics.
WITHOUT A KISS
VERS
too many words would end, would die
before clarity reached their mind
CHORUS
they left without a kiss goodbye
in a hug that didn't kill any desire
VERS
in a moment of trust, a glance, a smile
till the following path separates this while
CHORUS
they left without a kiss goodbye
and a missing word of truth
in a hug that didn't kill any desire
when one became two
VERS
the very last hug let hope reappear
this only belief won't wipe off the tear
CHORUS
they left without a kiss goodbye
and a missing word of truth
in a hug that didn't kill any desire
when one became two
they left without a kiss
when one became two