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Thread: Rebel From Hell (8 Replies, 8,000 Views) by JJCory3
Glad to see something new from you, Doug. I think my latest piece also has a more "poetic" feel too it, for whatever reason. Anyway, well done once again.
Thread: Money Is Everything (1 Replies, 1,952 Views) by JJCory3
Love it. One of my favorite lines on here in recent memory.
Thread: Loved You Too Much (4/27/15) (4 Replies, 2,805 Views) by JJCory3
Very nice, Kerri. Glad to see you're posting again :)
Thread: "My Life Is A Bullet" (4 Replies, 3,044 Views) by JJCory3
Really diggin' this. Good work!
Thread: Black Wings (2 Replies, 3,867 Views) by JJCory3
This is very good, Erik. Flows well, paints a picture. A bit repetitive at points, but hey... If it's not broke, don't fix it ;)
Keep up the good work!
Thread: MERCY VALENTINE a first song writing effort (4 Replies, 4,062 Views) by JJCory3
Very, very well-written. I'd say it's more poem than song, simply because of parallelism/structure. Still, an excellent first piece. Keep up the good work, and welcome to ATL!
Thread: All That's Left (2 Replies, 1,267 Views) by JJCory3
I disagree. I think those lines flow just fine with the rest of the verse. Also, pq92k, I would advise against giving "letter grades" on someone's thread, unless they ask for it. Maybe Jim doesn't...
Thread: Enough (11/18/14) (7 Replies, 2,528 Views) by JJCory3
Very impressive, Kerri! As everyone else has said, this is a very epic, bold piece. It grabs you from the start and stomps on you until it's over!
Thread: Take Me To The Disco (7 Replies, 8,666 Views) by JJCory3
Thank you, Tania! I was unsure of the exact number. I think that is very reasonable :)
Thread: Take Me To The Disco (7 Replies, 8,666 Views) by JJCory3
Hello all,
As a moderator here, I want to address some things...
BackInBlack and Amaryn, thank you for your concerns. I would say you could dial it down a bit (so as not to come off as a...
Thread: Last Breath (2 Replies, 2,439 Views) by JJCory3
Very good! Short and simple, but it's very emotional and very easy to relate to.
Thread: Second Best (9/10/14) (8 Replies, 3,891 Views) by JJCory3
This is wonderful! And yes, "brutally honest" is good :)
Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 328,377 Views) by JJCory3
Footprints walk one way
But the soul drifts another
Decisions haunt me
Thread: Window (From: ImmaRandy =] Free to leave replies...) (2 Replies, 6,073 Views) by JJCory3
I apologize if this comes off wrong, but is English your first language? I ask because this is a good piece, hindered only by some grammatical issues.
Thread: Pseudo Pedagogy (6 Replies, 2,919 Views) by JJCory3
I've found myself many times getting frustrated because I felt something wasn't "complete" or ready to submit. Then I realized that adding more often took away from the piece, or it was just filler...
Thread: "Parasites Among Wolves" (10 Replies, 3,742 Views) by JJCory3
...wait, you and moonride*r* are a couple?! #powerduo. Two of my favorite writers on here! Lol :P
But anyway, I don't to take away this thread or change the subject. This really is a great piece...
Thread: What about these lyrics? It's not a lot but maybe you guys could give some feedback? (10 Replies, 2,043 Views) by JJCory3
I agree, the first line is beautiful. I like your revised chorus, i would just suggest something like this to make it flow a little better (of course if you have something in mind for how its gonna...
Thread: Help with title would be appreciated (7 Replies, 1,856 Views) by JJCory3
Idk why, but the first thing that comes to mind is "Harmed Forces"... kinda an interesting play on words. Anyway, nice piece!
Thread: Better When We Share (7 Replies, 3,273 Views) by JJCory3
The theme reminds me a lot of "What It's Like" by Everlast. Deep stuff, very well written. Can't say enough about a great piece plugged with emotion. Keep up the good work!
Thread: my life (5 Replies, 3,059 Views) by JJCory3
Love the emotion! Good work.
Thread: Scars (5 Replies, 1,973 Views) by JJCory3
good work. I got the link to work, and the lyrics are beautiful!
Thread: Always & Forever (4 Replies, 2,097 Views) by JJCory3
I like this, a lot. Especially the first half. Good work!
Thread: Vertical (8 Replies, 1,819 Views) by JJCory3
Beautiful! I love how the song progresses. Reminds me of something I would write (in terms of rhyme scheme and imagery) :D Keep up the good work!
Thread: Fly Away (12 Replies, 2,258 Views) by JJCory3
Message is clear, lines are to the point, simple rhyme scheme. I like it, a lot actually.
Thread: Old but new.. (gotta finish this.) (2 Replies, 1,832 Views) by JJCory3
Beautiful. Really has the potential to be a beautiful, emotional song.