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• Poetry, Prison

  Thread: Poetry, Prison (0 Replies, 37,807 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  (a bit of fantasy again, for old times sake)
  
  I. Fire
  
  I read through the fires
  past lives, sun & above.
  I breathe atoms I've inhaled before...
  whence these thoughts...
  That which loftily...

• This is more interesting than my first impression...

  Thread: Echo (3 Replies, 6,267 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  This is more interesting than my first impression was. I especially like how you end the last stanza...drawing it out with an echo and a speaking heartbeat sorta..actually a really enjoyable read.
  ...

• This is very well written, and the flow is...

  Thread: Loose Lipped L-Kid (3 Replies, 6,194 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  This is very well written, and the flow is impeccable. I like how you experiment with that type of free flow of words. My first impression makes up for a puzzle, which is by all means positive!...

• Awesome, you are welcome to post more!

  Thread: Dalston Night Tale (7 Replies, 7,210 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Awesome, you are welcome to post more!

• ^ No need to be shy Technist ;) Anyways, this is...

  Thread: Dalston Night Tale (7 Replies, 7,210 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  ^ No need to be shy Technist ;) Anyways, this is really great. How long you've been writing?
  
  I would perhaps put a comma between
  
  you clocked my sly manoeuvre, planned
  to plant an undertone...

• Sticky: Foolish and stupid Weren't we all? Days of yore

  Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,161 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Foolish and stupid
  Weren't we all?
  Days of yore

• Sticky: All adventurous To encompass Entrophy

  Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,161 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  All adventurous
  To encompass
  Entrophy

• Sticky: Dreamful artistry The painter closes his eyes...

  Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,161 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Dreamful artistry
  The painter closes his eyes
  To another world

• Sticky: Only if we care or the need to wash our stares...

  Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,161 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Only if we care
  or the need to wash
  our stares away..

• Hues of Us

  Thread: Hues of Us (2 Replies, 6,015 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  (Below is a norwegian translation, figured it did well as a translated piece too.)
  
  I know that the air is true...
  I know that I was born, infant
  and the care of a mother as the love from a...

• A lady that gives me cards through her head..

  Thread: A lady that gives me cards through her head.. (2 Replies, 8,181 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Repeatedly I told myself; This lady stole her gypsy magic from somewhere..
  ..not that I believed in it, not that I would ever...not that I could tell..
  l et 's p la y wi t h t h e l a dy t ha ...

• Good Teshka! This was an enjoyable read and it...

  Thread: A sister song (10 Replies, 10,012 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Good Teshka! This was an enjoyable read and it seems you took my advice but still kept a part of yourself and let the imagery flow. And your explanation is wonderful because, you're thinking like a...

• I, escaped

  Thread: I, escaped (0 Replies, 4,617 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  And, a moment out of time
  I, escaped...
  
  Yet there's corruption
  the taste of..
  
  t h e re's.....? a s en se ..
  o f le ft...

• Your own frame of mind on this is anything I...

  Thread: ..kinosamtalen II‏ (5 Replies, 6,238 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Your own frame of mind on this is anything I could ask for and I feel honored...that it's not just a selection of randomness but rather unconscious(mind) conversations at the bottom of the sea which...

• Sticky: Life reforms That which from an Artificial cell

  Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,161 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Life reforms
  That which from an
  Artificial cell

• Good, which is? :-P

  Thread: ..kinosamtalen II‏ (5 Replies, 6,238 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Good, which is? :-P

• Oh ok, well that's understandable :-) I'm totally...

  Thread: Hava Kava Sunrise (9 Replies, 5,597 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Oh ok, well that's understandable :-) I'm totally depended on the internet but I use it to my own good...not to waste time :-) Don't stop writing though, some interesting points btw. It's certainly...

• It feels like you're forcing some rhymes... but...

  Thread: Hava Kava Sunrise (9 Replies, 5,597 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  It feels like you're forcing some rhymes... but nevertheless you have plenty of ideas here. Personally I find it a bit jarring because of it. If you want to rhyme in poetry, it should come naturally,...

• ..kinosamtalen II‏

  Thread: ..kinosamtalen II‏ (5 Replies, 6,238 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  An echo in the nearing stillness...
  
  
  
  
  
  
  
  "Just why wouldn't you let it go?"

• Sticky: Life befriends me Lies betray me Yet I'm stark

  Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,161 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Life befriends me
  Lies betray me
  Yet I'm stark

• That I sing for them

  Thread: That I sing for them (1 Replies, 4,207 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  .....in dusty chambers dwell... a name resides within his log of executions, and its title:
  
  
  
  
  *
  
  Why dost thou cry or little boy, are you afraid of me?
  Whence upon my altar, am I a demon of...

• Something quite so funny, but not as funny when you think about it.

  Thread: Something quite so funny, but not as funny when you think about it. (0 Replies, 3,711 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Her boobs were surreal, and kept growing inside my mind as the dream expanded on. And she was there, within me a times --// obsession solely fixated on her.
  
  In reality I've met her rarely, I even...

• Might be a little poetic indeed. Maybe a...

  Thread: More (2 Replies, 1,300 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Might be a little poetic indeed. Maybe a different presentation is what this needs... thanks! :)

• Oh haha, didn't see your comment there Amaryn,...

  Thread: Take your Sword (5 Replies, 2,704 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Oh haha, didn't see your comment there Amaryn, nice one ;-)

• More

  Thread: More (2 Replies, 1,300 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Accessing peace and what lies dormant
  Eternally swathed within us all
  Dive under or rise asunder
  Reach
  
  Or each as a consequence,
  layering and circling
  -thrive for more
  
  More is the...

• Thank you both :-) was somehow drunk last...

  Thread: Alcohol's a... (4 Replies, 4,092 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Thank you both :-) was somehow drunk last night...and I still don't remember the title I came up with that night. So that's what this piece is trying to uncover lol.

• I ****ing love this man, respect! Now would you...

  Thread: Venti Venti (5 Replies, 7,528 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  I ****ing love this man, respect! Now would you please show the rest of the world how it's supposed to be done? :) This is how rap should be, great rhymes with powerful meanings and free-flowing...

• Alcohol's a...

  Thread: Alcohol's a... (4 Replies, 4,092 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  I remember building towers
  wide enough for me.
  And the walls like the archives
  I've made down here before,
  for whence the darkness breach.
  I'm a ghost that roams and
  there's a ways I believe,...

• Quells

  Thread: Quells (1 Replies, 3,508 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  You'd think it would stop by now, why me? The emptiness that quells for more, that endless void.
  
  Some things cannot be fixed, and bad habits that comes from places... you'd hope for an end to it....

• He's a reknown conspiracist nuthead... there's...

  Thread: We're catching ships in the Rye (10 Replies, 10,104 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  He's a reknown conspiracist nuthead... there's nothing more to say about that.

• Ah yes, dark stuff Doug. I think I liked this...

  Thread: Midnight Sun (15 Replies, 11,063 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Ah yes, dark stuff Doug. I think I liked this piece way back, but now the button seems to be removed from this site =/ What impresses me is your tight rhyming scheme, and how rhythmic every single...

• Ok, I think I've made my final edit to this...

  Thread: We're catching ships in the Rye (10 Replies, 10,104 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Ok, I think I've made my final edit to this piece... felt a bit messy in the middle there. (so many ideas to finalize properly) Tell me if you like it or not :)
  
  Thanks to both of you Amaryn and...

• Nothing really, just general cheesiness. I wrote...

  Thread: Take your Sword (5 Replies, 2,704 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Nothing really, just general cheesiness. I wrote what first popped up in my mind. It sounds cocky but, that's the truth lol.

• How have I not read this Frankie, I think you...

  Thread: Empty (10 Replies, 6,958 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  How have I not read this Frankie, I think you perfectly described what emptiness is here. It is satisfying in a sense....because it rings so true.

• Very good flow, and placement of words! This is...

  Thread: Cristene (20 Replies, 11,689 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Very good flow, and placement of words! This is balls down hate, written in the best possible way. Not much to say here really, I enjoyed it! :)

• Oh and not to mention, I was also inspired by...

  Thread: We're catching ships in the Rye (10 Replies, 10,104 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Oh and not to mention, I was also inspired by this peculiar happening in Russia. You should check it out! There's also a game coming out for this :-P
  ...

• I'm still editing this quite a bit Amaryn, so...

  Thread: We're catching ships in the Rye (10 Replies, 10,104 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  I'm still editing this quite a bit Amaryn, so keep that in mind. Thank you so much for the reply, was worried I overdid it again with this one. I feel as though I'm not doing enough good on these...

• Take your Sword

  Thread: Take your Sword (5 Replies, 2,704 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  (Well, I made a parody of a typical cliche power metal song, which me and my friend are working on atm.
  The end is a little bit crazy-random hahah
  Enjoy!)
  
  
  "Once upon a time, a man was chosen...

• Oh, this sure had a somber mood to it. Would have...

  Thread: Alcoholics Of The Future (4 Replies, 1,494 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Oh, this sure had a somber mood to it. Would have loved to hear it in song format, I think Tom Waits could have made a great edition to this :-)
  
  My first favourite from you. You've also developed...

• Somehow I hear a little black sabbath in this....

  Thread: Crimson Man (4 Replies, 1,564 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Somehow I hear a little black sabbath in this. The lyrics are simple, and could easily fit that formula. However as I read this, it doesn't quite...capture me. But the flow is definitely there, the...

• It does make sense, yes be critical to yourself....

  Thread: Ghosts Of Our Past or Forever Haunted (1 Replies, 813 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  It does make sense, yes be critical to yourself. You will eventually land on a solution :)

• We're catching ships in the Rye

  Thread: We're catching ships in the Rye (10 Replies, 10,104 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  We're catching ships in the Rye
  
  
  The vibrations started early this morning...
  and the humming, birds of yore.
  Paving their way through the docks.

• Thank you for the reply, I'm glad you found it...

  Thread: A new roof of Mankind (3 Replies, 4,643 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Thank you for the reply, I'm glad you found it interesting. Ah yes you are right, roof could actually be misinterpreted in that way!

• How did I miss this one? ^^ Good work, you should...

  Thread: A Dying Dream (16 Replies, 7,491 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  How did I miss this one? ^^ Good work, you should pursue more writing Teshka :)

• I accidentally deleted my last edit note, but I...

  Thread: A new roof of Mankind (3 Replies, 4,643 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  I accidentally deleted my last edit note, but I took this off the shelves again, and redid some parts which needed some overhaul, I think.
  I thought it had some raw emotions to it, which was really...

• Thanks all, I guess it turned out better than...

  Thread: The empty moon (3 Replies, 3,910 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Thanks all, I guess it turned out better than expected! If there's anything you guys want me to comment on, please leave a link :)

• That's just fantastic writing there StadiaMania,...

  Thread: Timeless.. (1 Replies, 3,219 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  That's just fantastic writing there StadiaMania, really satisfying rap poem. Care to look at my newest? "the empty moon" Thanks :)

• The empty moon

  Thread: The empty moon (3 Replies, 3,910 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  The empty moon
  
  
  
  The empty moon was floating
  without a world
  and the people dancing
  within

• Kinosamtalen

  Thread: Kinosamtalen (0 Replies, 2,908 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  "My strategy is to listen to the movie conversation"
  
  "It was made and profiled like a box"
  
  
  "However I could not get this off my mind, and so I wondered
  of you"
  
  "Truthfully I was...

• Oh haha, I guess that's what I meant yes. Be...

  Thread: her name.. (11 Replies, 5,093 Views) by Eccer

  
  

  Oh haha, I guess that's what I meant yes. Be progressive yo!
  
  No but, I think the majority of lyrics/poems sites suffers from lack of real critic. If you are given continuous thanks and likes, you...