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• Matt's Song

  Thread: Matt's Song (0 Replies, 14,827 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hey guys, a friend of mine needed help writing some lyrics for a song he was working on based on a pretty bad break up he was experiencing. Unfortunately I inadvertently took over the writing process...

• Lost In Madness

  Thread: Lost In Madness (0 Replies, 14,944 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hey everyone. This one's a couple years old now and has managed to slip my mind for posting it. I was going through a pretty rough time and, as usual, used music and writing to work my way through...

• Lust

  Thread: Lust (0 Replies, 13,073 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Here’s what I have for the next song in my Inferno project called Lust. The circle of lust is depicted as a weather worn landscape with a giant storm swirling through it. The souls sent to this...

• Abandon Hope/Limbo

  Thread: Abandon Hope/Limbo (0 Replies, 12,354 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hot damn, it's been a while since I've posted anything on here! I decided to embark on a musical journey by creating all the music for a concept album based on Dante's Inferno. For those who don't...

• Keep On Trying

  Thread: Keep On Trying (0 Replies, 1,206 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Well, I've been gone for a little while. But in my absence, I have become the father to a beautiful baby girl. This is the song that I wrote for her so she will know how much I love her and that I...

• Seems like a pretty bold statement on...

  Thread: Blood In Your Name (3 Replies, 2,693 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Seems like a pretty bold statement on politics/religion to me. Am I anywhere near what you were aiming for? That aside, not a bad set at all. The biggest thing I would suggest is paying attention the...

• New Song, No Title

  Thread: New Song, No Title (2 Replies, 1,448 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This is my most recent outing. I wrote this for my friend and me. We've both been presented with the same situation but in different scenarios. So hopefully you like it. I would also like to ask for...

• Every time I take a look at someone's work, I try...

  Thread: Dead Hearts Don't Beat (1 Replies, 2,032 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Every time I take a look at someone's work, I try to think of it as a listener of the song, music and all. The one suggestion I can manage to come up with is in regards to the last line of the 2nd...

• I also think this is a fairly good set. I can see...

  Thread: Newbie here! c4c. Help please. (4 Replies, 1,423 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  I also think this is a fairly good set. I can see this fitting perfectly in the vein of a song like Circle by Slipknot (don't let the band name fool you, the song is done entirely on acoustic guitars...

• This rendition of it is a nice smooth acoustic,...

  Thread: Conflict Of Interest (Acoustic) (3 Replies, 1,565 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This rendition of it is a nice smooth acoustic, somewhat akin to Devil by Staind, if that helps at all.

• Conflict Of Interest (Acoustic)

  Thread: Conflict Of Interest (Acoustic) (3 Replies, 1,565 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Some of you may remember the last set that I posted called Conflict Of Interest. Well, given the motivations behind the song and the general instrumentation I had for it, there was just something...

• The concept is decent, but I think the execution...

  Thread: Metal let me know how it is.. Everything ends (5 Replies, 2,264 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  The concept is decent, but I think the execution of it is way too repetitive. It started getting kinda boring hearing about the end and how much we have to find a way. I'm not trying to come across...

• It's not too bad at all. I'd love to see it when...

  Thread: Quickly wrote it 5mins after i met a girl at school lol let me know what u think (17 Replies, 4,937 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  It's not too bad at all. I'd love to see it when more gets tacked on to it.

• Conflict Of Interest

  Thread: Conflict Of Interest (1 Replies, 2,239 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hello all! I know it's been a while since I last posted anything, but I hope to change that. This one was a very difficult set for me to write. This is actually about my brother. I found out recently...

• This was a very well done piece. I'm not sure how...

  Thread: The Void (15 Replies, 3,940 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This was a very well done piece. I'm not sure how you intend this to sound with music and what-not, but the only suggestion I have is in regards to the second chorus segment. It seems like the...

• Wounded Cry

  Thread: Wounded Cry (1 Replies, 1,346 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hey all! It's been a few weeks and I finally have a new one. The guys I'm playing with thought after the last song I posted (Two Faced) that we should try and keep in with the vein of mental...

• Believe me, I would love to add more in the way...

  Thread: Two Faced (5 Replies, 1,444 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Believe me, I would love to add more in the way of what's going on in the guy's head, but with the music we already have it wouldn't work.

• I just realized how short this was lol For those...

  Thread: Two Faced (5 Replies, 1,444 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  I just realized how short this was lol For those of you that are familiar with my work, you will notice that the content and style, for the most part, is the same but the length is...

• This is very good. Turning something dismal and...

  Thread: Just Another Suicide (5 Replies, 5,132 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This is very good. Turning something dismal and bleak into something kinda hopeful. Not a very easy thing to do. I'm impressed!

• Two Faced

  Thread: Two Faced (5 Replies, 1,444 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hey all! It's been a little while and this is my band's newest outing. This was put together, music and all, a couple days ago. It's about a guy that's aware of a second personality within him that...

• Waitin on you Tyler.........

  Thread: Piss me off (38 Replies, 4,761 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Waitin on you Tyler.........

• let's try this out for size, see if i can still...

  Thread: Piss me off (38 Replies, 4,761 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  let's try this out for size, see if i can still do this........
  
  i don't know what's worse, her for cheatin or you for chasin,
  aint a b tch in the world worth goin and defacin
  your pride that's...

• Thanks a lot for the kind words. I really...

  Thread: I Say I Believe (5 Replies, 1,385 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Thanks a lot for the kind words. I really appreciate it!

• All critiques are welcome, whether they're...

  Thread: I Say I Believe (5 Replies, 1,385 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  All critiques are welcome, whether they're positive or negative.

• I Say I Believe

  Thread: I Say I Believe (5 Replies, 1,385 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hey everyone! I just wrote something up for my wife as an anniversary gift. Let me know what you think!
  
  Walking through life outside my world,
  I find myself standing alone.
  I look up to find a...

• I would say something like "Reflections Of...

  Thread: Have a title for this song? (13 Replies, 2,007 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  I would say something like "Reflections Of Consequence" solely for what is said in the last line of the chorus.

• Everything takes a bit of practice. However some...

  Thread: Writing Songs (4 Replies, 2,055 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Everything takes a bit of practice. However some people will come across as more inspired than others. I haven't written any new lyrics in a little while solely because I haven't had that type of...

• http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/lyrics-review/86...

  Thread: Summer in My Own Shadow(acoustic song, comments welcome) (2 Replies, 1,136 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/lyrics-review/86417-for-this-i-pray.html
  
  Check out the link above. Your song reminds me so much of mine. There is so much said with the words you used. The...

• I love it! I love the contradictions made between...

  Thread: Offensive song (potentially) (3 Replies, 1,197 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  I love it! I love the contradictions made between what religion seems to be meant for and what it blaintantly does. Unfortunately most religions have become nothing more than power hungry...

• Very well done. I notice a lot of how I write in...

  Thread: Her Final Words (8 Replies, 1,664 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Very well done. I notice a lot of how I write in what I saw here. It's a shame that these kinds of stories float about, and even more of a shame knowing that they actually happen. I actually wrote...

• Thanks a lot for the kind words. It really means...

  Thread: Suicide River (4 Replies, 1,988 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Thanks a lot for the kind words. It really means a lot.

• Personally, I'm a metalhead, but this looks a lot...

  Thread: A girl named fate (1 Replies, 1,159 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Personally, I'm a metalhead, but this looks a lot like the kind of thing that I would write myself. I can't really find anything that needs to be revised, especially if it's one of your more popular...

• Pretty good effort. Reminds me of a cross between...

  Thread: Making music (2 Replies, 1,027 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Pretty good effort. Reminds me of a cross between Thunder Rolls by Garth Brooks and Animals by Nickelback. The first thing I would change is the title to "Close Encounters" because it seems to be the...

• No, nowhere near self-loathing. This one's from...

  Thread: Within The Mirror (8 Replies, 2,114 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  No, nowhere near self-loathing. This one's from the perspective of a fallen soldier. The first verse is about the soldier finding out that his "signigicant other" cheated on him while he was...

• dearsweetjesusthiswasf*ckinAWESOME!!!!!!

  Thread: Funny/nasty song/ (24 Replies, 10,208 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  dearsweetjesusthiswasf*ckinAWESOME!!!!!!

• Thanks a lot for the kind words. It truly means...

  Thread: Within The Mirror (8 Replies, 2,114 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Thanks a lot for the kind words. It truly means the world when my work appeals to others.

• Not bad at all. It kinda reminds me of The Black...

  Thread: Alone on this road (2 Replies, 1,458 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Not bad at all. It kinda reminds me of The Black Dahlia by Hollywood Undead.
  It's got a great tone, decent flow.....you seem to have everything working for you on this one. There's only a couple...

• This set is amazingly relateable. I think that...

  Thread: War with time - written just now in moment of inspriation (or madness) (5 Replies, 1,481 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This set is amazingly relateable. I think that concept of having lost time and wanting to get it back is something that a lot of people think about and just don't really talk about for fear of...

• You've got some great imagery here, however I...

  Thread: Crucified by Karma (!!!!!REVISED!!!!!!) (3 Replies, 2,729 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  You've got some great imagery here, however I think that your choice to make some of the lines so long takes away from the flow of the words, specifically the last verse before "Step Down......"....

• I wouldn't have been able to tell this was your...

  Thread: Break Me (7 Replies, 2,580 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  I wouldn't have been able to tell this was your first full songwriting effort had you not said something. This is really impressive! There's only one suggestion I'd like to make though. It's in...

• This same thing happened to me a little while...

  Thread: How do you write your lyrics? (28 Replies, 7,335 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This same thing happened to me a little while ago. I was driving around and heard Beyonce's "If I Were A Boy". The song, in my opinion, wasn't that great, but the "If I Were..." concept was really...

• Victimville

  Thread: Victimville (1 Replies, 1,089 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  A nice set of lyrics portraying my home town of Victorville. If any of you know where that is.......you have my deepest apologies.
  
  There’s nothing but nothing
  Around this dead world.
  The oasis...

• Spoken like a true soldier. Are you in the...

  Thread: Within The Mirror (8 Replies, 2,114 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Spoken like a true soldier. Are you in the service?

• Within The Mirror

  Thread: Within The Mirror (8 Replies, 2,114 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  This one has three different aspects. First is on a personal level, second is professional, third is public, all of which are from the perspective of a fallen soldier before and after death.
  ...

• Taking another look at the lyrics, I'd like to...

  Thread: Don't know what to call this, any suggestions? (6 Replies, 1,378 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Taking another look at the lyrics, I'd like to make the suggestion of "Mouth Wide Shut".

• Hmmm......given the content of the song, I would...

  Thread: Don't know what to call this, any suggestions? (6 Replies, 1,378 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Hmmm......given the content of the song, I would say "Escaping Home". That seems like it sums up everything that's said in the lyrics.

• Personally, I write my lyrics based on things I...

  Thread: How do you write your lyrics? (28 Replies, 7,335 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Personally, I write my lyrics based on things I see and hear, whether it be something that's happened to me, a movie I've watched, or whatever. It could be something as small as hearing a line in a...

• Good job! This is much better than the last...

  Thread: Darkside (Revision part 2) (4 Replies, 1,672 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Good job! This is much better than the last couple versions of it that you've posted. I'd love to hear the music to go along with it.

• I agree with TEVOLI, this flows really well. All...

  Thread: As of now, Untitled (2 Replies, 1,188 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  I agree with TEVOLI, this flows really well. All I can say is add some more and finish it up, cuz I think you're really onto something here. Just from what I read, may I suggest entitling it "Flaming...

• Very good job. I know quite a few people in this...

  Thread: Holes in my skin. [PLEASE COMMENT!] (5 Replies, 2,200 Views) by Sewn Up

  
  

  Very good job. I know quite a few people in this very same situation, and this is fairly spot on to what I see happening to them. I can see why MoonRide42 feels the way he does about the "grounded in...