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Thread: Who won this battle? (2 Replies, 20,810 Views) by JayImmortal
You definitely had better metaphors, a touch of originality, went more personal against him than he did you... You outran him by miles. Take it from someone who's been writing hip-hop battle lyrics...
Thread: Are you not entertained? (1 Replies, 2,437 Views) by JayImmortal
I really love the concept. If you can build more on this, I would love to read it.
Thread: Untitled 2.0 (1 Replies, 2,719 Views) by JayImmortal
This is one of the few verses I find here that are already decent. I don't think I have much criticism to offer-- You're already improving in the right direction on your own! All I can say is, keep...
Thread: Freestyle (1 Replies, 1,076 Views) by JayImmortal
The only thing I found entertaining about these lyrics is that you mentioned how it's "only gonna get worse". Look, I'm going to critique this harshly and give you some pointers. I'm going to assume...