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Glad to see something new from you, Doug. I think...
Thread: Rebel From Hell (8 Replies, 7,806 Views) by JJCory3
Glad to see something new from you, Doug. I think my latest piece also has a more "poetic" feel too it, for whatever reason. Anyway, well done once again.
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Love it. One of my favorite lines on here in...
Thread: Money Is Everything (1 Replies, 1,922 Views) by JJCory3
Love it. One of my favorite lines on here in recent memory.
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Very nice, Kerri. Glad to see you're posting...
Thread: Loved You Too Much (4/27/15) (4 Replies, 2,744 Views) by JJCory3
Very nice, Kerri. Glad to see you're posting again :)
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Really diggin' this. Good work!
Thread: "My Life Is A Bullet" (4 Replies, 2,989 Views) by JJCory3
Really diggin' this. Good work!
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This is very good, Erik. Flows well, paints a...
Thread: Black Wings (2 Replies, 3,836 Views) by JJCory3
This is very good, Erik. Flows well, paints a picture. A bit repetitive at points, but hey... If it's not broke, don't fix it ;)
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Very, very well-written. I'd say it's more poem...
Thread: MERCY VALENTINE a first song writing effort (4 Replies, 3,995 Views) by JJCory3
Very, very well-written. I'd say it's more poem than song, simply because of parallelism/structure. Still, an excellent first piece. Keep up the good work, and welcome to ATL!
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I disagree. I think those lines flow just fine...
Thread: All That's Left (2 Replies, 1,245 Views) by JJCory3
I disagree. I think those lines flow just fine with the rest of the verse. Also, pq92k, I would advise against giving "letter grades" on someone's thread, unless they ask for it. Maybe Jim doesn't...
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Very impressive, Kerri! As everyone else has...
Thread: Enough (11/18/14) (7 Replies, 2,432 Views) by JJCory3
Very impressive, Kerri! As everyone else has said, this is a very epic, bold piece. It grabs you from the start and stomps on you until it's over!
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Thank you, Tania! I was unsure of the exact...
Thread: Take Me To The Disco (7 Replies, 8,607 Views) by JJCory3
Thank you, Tania! I was unsure of the exact number. I think that is very reasonable :)
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Hello all,
As a moderator here, I want to...
Thread: Take Me To The Disco (7 Replies, 8,607 Views) by JJCory3
Hello all,
As a moderator here, I want to address some things...
BackInBlack and Amaryn, thank you for your concerns. I would say you could dial it down a bit (so as not to come off as a... -
Very good! Short and simple, but it's very...
Thread: Last Breath (2 Replies, 2,418 Views) by JJCory3
Very good! Short and simple, but it's very emotional and very easy to relate to.
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This is wonderful! And yes, "brutally honest" is...
Thread: Second Best (9/10/14) (8 Replies, 3,852 Views) by JJCory3
This is wonderful! And yes, "brutally honest" is good :)
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Sticky:
Footprints walk one way
But the soul drifts...
Thread: Haiku (1,025 Replies, 327,277 Views) by JJCory3
Footprints walk one way
But the soul drifts another
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I apologize if this comes off wrong, but is...
Thread: Window (From: ImmaRandy =] Free to leave replies...) (2 Replies, 5,834 Views) by JJCory3
I apologize if this comes off wrong, but is English your first language? I ask because this is a good piece, hindered only by some grammatical issues.
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I've found myself many times getting frustrated...
Thread: Pseudo Pedagogy (6 Replies, 2,874 Views) by JJCory3
I've found myself many times getting frustrated because I felt something wasn't "complete" or ready to submit. Then I realized that adding more often took away from the piece, or it was just filler...
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...wait, you and moonride*r* are a couple?!...
Thread: "Parasites Among Wolves" (10 Replies, 3,714 Views) by JJCory3
...wait, you and moonride*r* are a couple?! #powerduo. Two of my favorite writers on here! Lol :P
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I agree, the first line is beautiful. I like your...
Thread: What about these lyrics? It's not a lot but maybe you guys could give some feedback? (10 Replies, 1,991 Views) by JJCory3
I agree, the first line is beautiful. I like your revised chorus, i would just suggest something like this to make it flow a little better (of course if you have something in mind for how its gonna...
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Idk why, but the first thing that comes to mind...
Thread: Help with title would be appreciated (7 Replies, 1,805 Views) by JJCory3
Idk why, but the first thing that comes to mind is "Harmed Forces"... kinda an interesting play on words. Anyway, nice piece!
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The theme reminds me a lot of "What It's Like" by...
Thread: Better When We Share (7 Replies, 3,209 Views) by JJCory3
The theme reminds me a lot of "What It's Like" by Everlast. Deep stuff, very well written. Can't say enough about a great piece plugged with emotion. Keep up the good work!
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Love the emotion! Good work.
Thread: my life (5 Replies, 2,839 Views) by JJCory3
Love the emotion! Good work.
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good work. I got the link to work, and the lyrics...
Thread: Scars (5 Replies, 1,914 Views) by JJCory3
good work. I got the link to work, and the lyrics are beautiful!
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I like this, a lot. Especially the first half....
Thread: Always & Forever (4 Replies, 2,041 Views) by JJCory3
I like this, a lot. Especially the first half. Good work!
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Beautiful! I love how the song progresses....
Thread: Vertical (8 Replies, 1,741 Views) by JJCory3
Beautiful! I love how the song progresses. Reminds me of something I would write (in terms of rhyme scheme and imagery) :D Keep up the good work!
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Message is clear, lines are to the point, simple...
Thread: Fly Away (12 Replies, 2,210 Views) by JJCory3
Message is clear, lines are to the point, simple rhyme scheme. I like it, a lot actually.
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Beautiful. Really has the potential to be a...
Thread: Old but new.. (gotta finish this.) (2 Replies, 1,786 Views) by JJCory3
Beautiful. Really has the potential to be a beautiful, emotional song.