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• oooohhhhhhh....I guess that could be sexy.....:)

  Thread: Married To You (5 Replies, 3,306 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  oooohhhhhhh....I guess that could be sexy.....:)

• What the heck is a philtrum? LOL

  Thread: Married To You (5 Replies, 3,306 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  What the heck is a philtrum? LOL

• Hey all comments are keep or sweep! :)

  Thread: Something Good (In Time) (11 Replies, 2,915 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hey all comments are keep or sweep! :)

• I like this but am wondering if writing it from...

  Thread: Something Good (In Time) (11 Replies, 2,915 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I like this but am wondering if writing it from 1st person wouldn't be stronger...and You got all descriptive in the chorus... which doesn't answer why you are writing the song because the first 2...

• The last line of each paragraph is the title of...

  Thread: A Man Needs A Woman (5 Replies, 2,177 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  The last line of each paragraph is the title of the song. It doesn't have to rhyme.

• Then how come thats not the chorus of the song? ...

  Thread: A Man Needs A Woman (5 Replies, 2,177 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Then how come thats not the chorus of the song?
  
  Oh Doug he also wrote the song AABA...which you said you were trying to do.

• This made me laugh, made me go off in a different...

  Thread: Getting Old Blues (22 Replies, 6,971 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  This made me laugh, made me go off in a different direction then your song though...lol
  
  Gum my meat
  And my women
  
  I'm not into focusing on getting older, I am its not going away and I can't...

• Babe, need more descriptions eg...Pink...."Just...

  Thread: 'want you back' (6 Replies, 1,635 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Babe, need more descriptions eg...Pink...."Just give me a reason"....
  
  When you talk about scars that is strong and deep stuff but you need more to cement the image such as Pinks lines below...
  ...

• That's good Mike...these are good ideas for a...

  Thread: Heart In My Chest.. (4 Replies, 1,844 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  That's good Mike...these are good ideas for a song...try and pull out the strongest line or two then rewrite!

• Hey they are all good but not lyrics. They could...

  Thread: Heart In My Chest.. (4 Replies, 1,844 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hey they are all good but not lyrics. They could be if you worked on the ideas of each write. That is how most songs start anyway!
  
  my 2 cents.

• Hi, I like the idea that you are writing but I...

  Thread: Someone read my song (3 Replies, 1,563 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hi,
  
  I like the idea that you are writing but I feel like you are all over the board. Meaning the lines are vague and I can't see the picture clearly. You're just complaining...(which is ok) but to...

• Do you have any finished songs recorded that I...

  Thread: Getting Old Blues (22 Replies, 6,971 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Do you have any finished songs recorded that I can listen to?

• Doug, I noticed you are a musician do you put any...

  Thread: Getting Old Blues (22 Replies, 6,971 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Doug, I noticed you are a musician do you put any of your lyrics to music?

• Okay you don't hear the song that way, I wouldn't...

  Thread: Old School (22 Replies, 10,768 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Okay you don't hear the song that way, I wouldn't want you to stifle the creativity you obviously have. So, write the song the way you hear it then finesse it into the form you want it to be in. Make...

• It's because its not easy~!!!

  Thread: Old School (22 Replies, 10,768 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  It's because its not easy~!!!

• Hi, Feels more like a rant to me or a long...

  Thread: White collar junkies (3 Replies, 1,917 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hi,
  
  Feels more like a rant to me or a long poem...You are saying the same thing over and over again. We got the point after the 2nd verse. Could be shortened with a bridge put in how it relates to...

• to trite...know it all like...good idea say it...

  Thread: Own Up (10 Replies, 2,211 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  to trite...know it all like...good idea say it differently
  
  You've got these great verses and you need something extra to tie together like a revelation that this person had and now he can own up...

• co writing is about 2 minds one idea not 2 minds...

  Thread: A Wolf In The Woods (by Rickey Joe and 2numbers) (3 Replies, 2,298 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  co writing is about 2 minds one idea not 2 minds each put there own idea in the song...just sayin.....:)

• just add something extra what else would you say...

  Thread: Own Up (10 Replies, 2,211 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  just add something extra what else would you say thats not the same as the verses or chorus

• I like the way you started this out. The first...

  Thread: A Wolf In The Woods (by Rickey Joe and 2numbers) (3 Replies, 2,298 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I like the way you started this out. The first verse is strong and goes with the chours then you took a different situation for the 2 and 3 rd verse its ok but I wanted to hear the continuation of...

• This lyric can be anything. the meter is awesome,...

  Thread: Excuses (5 Replies, 2,526 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  This lyric can be anything. the meter is awesome, Squishy whoever you are you have real direct way of saying things. It doesn't come off judgmental or no it all, it just comes out as your saying...

• Put a two line bridge in to twist it all up then...

  Thread: Own Up (10 Replies, 2,211 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Put a two line bridge in to twist it all up then back to the chorus. I love the meter I'm feeling it as I say it. Great job.

• Look into song structure... and you will be able...

  Thread: Celebrate (6 Replies, 2,460 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Look into song structure... and you will be able to whittle this idea down.

• New Resource Series

  Thread: New Resource Series (0 Replies, 1,751 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  New Resource Series
  
  http://lyricscenestudio.com/songwriters-on-songwriting-series/

• this is excellent. I would like to see another...

  Thread: Strangest Places (6 Replies, 3,271 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  this is excellent. I would like to see another piece of info in the bridge though...You are repeating the same thing as the rest of the lyric, give something quirky another piece of info, the oh yeah...

• I like the feel of the music...nice an swingy......

  Thread: God Given Talent (1 Replies, 1,751 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I like the feel of the music...nice an swingy...
  
  I like the we've got future verse the best. very nice.

• lololol

  Thread: paper thin walls (7 Replies, 2,641 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  lololol

• I don't get it...I think your idea is a good one...

  Thread: In Your Mirror (6 Replies, 2,513 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I don't get it...I think your idea is a good one but you went to far off the edge come back to the middle...

• Do you need love in your mind or your heart? I...

  Thread: Baby, Goodbye... (8 Replies, 2,154 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Do you need love in your mind or your heart? I need love in my heart. but I am a girl.....;)
  
  Instead of when you were not there I could feel you..
  
  Why don't you get descriptive..
  
  when I...

• I like this nice descriptions... this is just...

  Thread: Famous Old Painters (2 Replies, 1,984 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I like this nice descriptions...
  
  this is just my opinion but I think you can find a better word then "caterwaul", I don't even know what that means....lol

• Sorry Ive been away for soo long...My cable was...

  Thread: paper thin walls (7 Replies, 2,641 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Sorry Ive been away for soo long...My cable was out for 7 days due to the storm...
  
  But found the lyric interesting, but I guess I'm gonna show my personality....I got stuck on the 5 minutes of...

• Hi Kmatt I like the lyric....I might shorten the...

  Thread: What We Believe (2 Replies, 1,652 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hi Kmatt
  I like the lyric....I might shorten the title to "believe"....also put it in the first person....it has a powerful punch when its read that way...
  you just cant leave it
  You just keep...

• Yes I do!!!!....:) Lucky me...:)

  Thread: Let me in your naked soul (8 Replies, 3,851 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Yes I do!!!!....:) Lucky me...:)

• I keep returning to this and rereading it....this...

  Thread: Let me in your naked soul (8 Replies, 3,851 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I keep returning to this and rereading it....this lyric creates want......um....that's pretty dam good.....

• Good piece of writing for the times we live in.

  Thread: When arrogance Surpasses Shame (11 Replies, 5,916 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Good piece of writing for the times we live in.

• Well, this is surely descriptive! The verses...

  Thread: In Sleep (2 Replies, 2,433 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Well, this is surely descriptive!
  
  The verses work...I would take away is this a dream and flesh line...it feels like it waters it down. The heavy line is I live in my own worst nightmares. Maybe...

• @ Amaryn You only need to follow industry...

  Thread: Honesty (55 Replies, 13,888 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  @ Amaryn You only need to follow industry standard if you want someone else to sing your stuff. If you play out and people like what you play then your brain is your only limitation for creativity. ...

• I like this....its a different title about a...

  Thread: Hey Mister (She's In The Arms Of A Friend...) ver. 2 (2 Replies, 1,974 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I like this....its a different title about a universal subject...I might keep the title more to the chorus so it has more power...I can just hear that power voice coming across with hey mister....but...

• it has a sweetness too it.

  Thread: Me Me Mine (17 Replies, 3,986 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  it has a sweetness too it.

• The "daddy" in the chorus throws you for a...

  Thread: Run (20 Replies, 4,839 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  The "daddy" in the chorus throws you for a loop....cool
  I usually think this is going to be about a boyfriend or husband but this is different.
  Sorry to hear its real.

• Resources and Tips

  Thread: Resources and Tips (0 Replies, 1,584 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hi Everyone,
  
  It has come to my attention that putting a url other then to another url in the All The Lyrics site in a signature is a no-no. I fixed that. I am allowed to let you know that you can...

• I like this story. Very relevant and today.

  Thread: We call this life (8 Replies, 2,755 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I like this story. Very relevant and today.

• I feel what you are saying much more in this...

  Thread: I carry on (8 Replies, 3,012 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I feel what you are saying much more in this version. I like this version! Nice...:)
  
  I went and looked up Cohen's work. He is a great writer and speaks like he's talking to a friend. I can...

• The paragraph you just wrote explains it. So...

  Thread: I carry on (8 Replies, 3,012 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  The paragraph you just wrote explains it. So write that story. Start off with some of it in your first verse.
  
  I was made of flesh and bone
  living in a short sighted pleasure focused world
  
  When...

• I don't know what its about other then the...

  Thread: I carry on (8 Replies, 3,012 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  I don't know what its about other then the title...I carry on...your metaphors are all over the place. The second verse sounds like you r complaining...which in itself is not bad but I don't get a...

• Hi I hear you something to help your lyrics....

  Thread: I carry on (8 Replies, 3,012 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  Hi
  
  I hear you something to help your lyrics. I'll bite.
  
  The way I read this its a real deep piece ...not very commercial if that is what you ar looking for...the language is not easy to...

• This. Is fun!!

  Thread: Contradiction (1 Replies, 1,373 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  This. Is fun!!

• TeeJei, First and foremost you never have to...

  Thread: They don't see (13 Replies, 3,356 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  TeeJei,
  
  First and foremost you never have to apologize for anything you've written. Every writer is entitled to write how they want to write. Its a god given thing!!
  
  We are in a critique room...

• No....AABA is something like this....(off the...

  Thread: Old School (22 Replies, 10,768 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  No....AABA
  
  is something like this....(off the cuff here)
  
  You're Never Far Away
  
  Verse(A)
  I hit the shower with shampoo and soap
  couldn't wait to scrub away the day
  sunscreen salt n ocean...

• ok...but the reader doesn't understand that, so...

  Thread: They don't see (13 Replies, 3,356 Views) by KathyB

  
  

  ok...but the reader doesn't understand that, so the concept of "they" needs to be clarified in the lyric. You have to introduce "they" in the lyric because as the reader/listener I'm lost. That means...