Originally Posted by Zachre

Alright shut the **** up and get some confidence. Your being a little *****, using your lack of anger as an excuse for not doing good and not trying. Get out of denial, don't give yourself excuses, and PROVE yourself. Give something your all. I mean maybe that's why your girlfriend cheated on you, due to lack of confidence. Honors course doesn't make you a nerd, it shows you can do better than the rest.

Your fatality is giving yourself all these excuses
Your reality is living in stealth, that your useless.
You wait for sex and that I can understand.
But I perplex at how you even can

With a **** the size of your confidence
Learn a trick, play dead, and don't respond to this.
Because you probably will get insecure and all upset.
But dog, you honestly need a cure and a visit to the vet.

Your an atheist, meaning there is no above.
This is the craziest thing I've heard of.
I mean, how do you think you were mystically created?
From Dirt? Makes sense, I mean your physically related

Cus your down on the floor, on the toe of my shoe.
Don't frown, I have no more to let go on you.
Take what remains of your pride and please boy leave me be.
Before I go insane and decide to destroy your dignity.

U do have skills

Originally Posted by Molotova

U do have skills

Hahaha thanks, I think that will piss him off, or depress him. One of the two

lol u guys r funny

I see this kid doesnt have much to believe in
why? 3 years of chasin id have the bxtch screamin
dreamin about the cuddy, shes in a cold sweat
this chick is fiendin snortin the scent where i slept
i dont know about you though, but my you know
wat goes in rough, harder than brillow
yo you need to wake up, get a tape up
The Jewfro aint gonna get any booty shaked up

ok this isnt as good as yalls but i dont give a f**k

grow the hell up man
i mean no offence but all u gotta do is talk to a girl u have feelingss for and it dont matter if u gotta let ur p*nis run wild in ur pants
befriend her and just walk up to her at a club and ask "hey you wanna dance?"

let's try this out for size, see if i can still do this........

i don't know what's worse, her for cheatin or you for chasin,
aint a b tch in the world worth goin and defacin
your pride that's worth sh t, throwin a fit,
pleadin for solace when yo words aint worth spit,

think of whatcha sayin, your a geekin gamer freak,
got no god above, a meathead with meat to sneak,
no wonder she left you, the gym-class looka
paid attention to everything but ya little willing hooka

its a good thing i came around and picked yo lady up,
got her screamin on the bed til the cops came up,
tell ya what f g, you dont know what you was missin,
loved those d ck-suckin lips and the way she was kissin
and lickin her c m off me d ck like a sucka,
said "I'M GLAD TO HAVE YOU AND NOT THAT MUTHAF CKA!"
so you go play ya black ops and walk alone in the streets,
i got my own black ops with yo girl in the sheets!

Hey Sewn Up, I've been wondering if you might take a stab at this sooner or later ... nice job I think, as good as most or all I've read here.

Tyler, just FYI ... take it from someone who's been around for a long time:

If you don't give it a try
Then she'll start to wonder why
She'll be either pissed or hurt
If you don't put her in the dirt
Make it her choice Yes or No
Then just go with the flow
If she backs against the wall
Don't let it pucker, take it all
Feel the heat, give her meat
Then she won't be on the street
Somebody else's silky sheath
Take it while you got it boy
She wants to be your girlie toy
And that's alright, that's how it is
Boy just takin care a biz.

Ok now pleeeeease be nice to me cuz I'm too old to be doin' this anyway

Originally Posted by MoonRide42

Hey Sewn Up, I've been wondering if you might take a stab at this sooner or later ... nice job I think, as good as most or all I've read here.

Tyler, just FYI ... take it from someone who's been around for a long time:

If you don't give it a try
Then she'll start to wonder why
She'll be either pissed or hurt
If you don't put her in the dirt
Make it her choice Yes or No
Then just go with the flow
If she backs against the wall
Don't let it pucker, take it all
Feel the heat, give her meat
Then she won't be on the street
Somebody else's silky sheath
Take it while you got it boy
She wants to be your girlie toy
And that's alright, that's how it is
Boy just takin care a biz.

Ok now pleeeeease be nice to me cuz I'm too old to be doin' this anyway

I'm a lover, not a hater. x

You're quick Molotova, I was still trying to get rid of a double-post. And thanks, that's good to know. Me too. And personally, I really hate mind-games.

Wanna know why I wrote this? Cuz more than once I confused the hell out of a girl by being too "nice", or so I was told. But this is all I'm gonna do here coz the competition is way too much for me

Where is this Tyler kid now? He just kind of vanished haha.

Waitin on you Tyler.........

Alright guys I am back!! Sorry it took so long. As I have Pm'd I do believe two people I was having some computer trouble, damn viruses! I also went to go visit my brother up at college for a week. Sorry for taking so long guys! I honestly don't even know where to start... But here we go

Here we go Ty6270 is now officially back
Ready to slay you wannabes a demonic attack
Rhymes and beat are two things you all lack
Listen up kiddies as in your mouth I dip my sac

Like batman a killer of the night waiting on my balcony
All of you saying this **** has given me an epiphany
Try to knock me down and strip me of all dignity
It will never work when the raps you spit are this shitty

You have awoken the dragon a killer flame now lit
I'm like Mj raping all of you kids stop throwin your fit
My confidence is huge like that of a ten ton truck
Must mean I have a big ****. so again try your luck

Religious theories are pointless there just a logical fallacy
They make no sense and have no truth but your too blind to see
Your lyrics make no sense remove your heads delusions
You being a good rapper is a joke, straight up illusions

You can't stop me I'm on my high roll
Lyrics imploding your head skill takin its toll
You can't anger the beast, I just laugh and keep my cool
Thinkin you can diss me that easily makes you a damn fool

Trying to make an elaborate scheme to come back to this
You probably think your good but ignorance is bliss
After dealing with me your cerebrum will be sore
At least I had a girl, I don't just **** random *****s.

Sorry it took so long to get back to you guys, I really am. I will try to be faster next time in getting back now that my computer isn't dying on me, and I'm actually home. Thanks for posting guys!

There you go, now the next step is working on an inner flow! It takes more time but the rhythm goes up exponentially

Inner flow? How many types of flow are there...?? Haha. Hard to battle against like three people within one rhyme haha. Thank you for the criticism Zachre. Anything that will help me get better I'm glad to receive.

Yeah Inner Flow bro! Such as
Take what remains of your pride and please boy leave me be.
Before I go insane and decide to destroy your dignity.

Remains flows with insane. Pride with decide, Please boy and destroy, Leave me be and dignity. Instead of rhyming the last word, you use assonance or rhymes in the middle of your lines to increase the rhythm.

Inner flow = multi rhymes
rather than just the last word in every sentence

Uh did she really just quote the same exact thing Molo said..?? And alright, Thank you Colosso =)

Yep, she did. People like me so much, they start quoting me already. Hahaa

Imitation is the sincerest form of flattery

On the other hand, that post may just be spam. They try to sneak stuff in all the time, sometimes the mods spot them right away but sometimes they don't.